Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Reduce hesitation and repetition, correct basic grammar (article use, subject-verb agreement), and make the answer more concise while keeping natural expression. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific reasons with linking words. Avoid filler words and repeated phrases.

예시: Yes, I love taking photos of different views because they add beauty and life to my pictures. For example, when I photograph a sunset over the sea, the colours and reflections make the scene feel vibrant and emotional.

제안: Remove hesitations and redundant phrases; use clearer linking words and more precise vocabulary (e.g., 'architectural features', 'landmarks'). Provide one concise example to support your opinion and avoid repeating 'urban areas'.

예시: I prefer urban views because cities offer diverse architectural features and landmarks. For example, photographing a skyline with historic buildings and modern skyscrapers gives interesting contrasts and visual variety.

제안: Eliminate repetition, tighten grammar (remove duplicated words, improve verb forms), and give one specific reason with an example. Use linking words like 'because' or 'for example' to make your point coherent.

예시: I prefer views in other countries because they offer sights I rarely see at home and often have rich historical backgrounds. For example, photographing an ancient temple abroad gives me a sense of history and creates lasting memories.

× Yes, I love taking pictures of different views because it gives the IT adds the beauty to the pictures and it make it free.

✓ Yes, I love taking pictures of different views because they add beauty to the pictures and make them feel free.

The original sentence mixes pronouns and has subject-verb agreement errors. 'Pictures' is plural, so use plural pronouns and verbs: 'they add' and 'make them'. Remove extraneous words ('the IT adds') and use 'feel free' to describe the impression; ensure pronoun reference is clear. Suggestion: Identify the noun each pronoun refers to and match number (singular/plural) and verb agreement accordingly.

× It makes the picture feel like it has life in it.

✓ It makes the picture feel as if it has life in it.

While the original is understandable, 'feel like' is informal; 'feel as if' is more appropriate in formal speech. No subject-verb disagreement here, but clarity and register improvement is recommended. Suggestion: Use 'feel as if' for a clearer and slightly more formal expression.

× Uh, I prefer views in urban areas because in urban areas there are more different features than in rural areas.

✓ I prefer views in urban areas because there are more varied features than in rural areas.

'More different' is not natural English; use 'more varied' or 'different kinds of'. Also avoid repeating 'in urban areas' unnecessarily. Suggestion: Use adjectives like 'varied' or phrases like 'different kinds of' to compare variety.

× For example, in urban areas you can get a picture, uh, with a view of tall buildings and tourist attractions, which makes the picture more beautiful.

✓ For example, in urban areas you can take a picture that shows tall buildings and tourist attractions, which makes the picture more attractive.

'Get a picture' is colloquial; 'take a picture that shows' is clearer. Also 'more beautiful' is acceptable but 'more attractive' fits better with photographic context. Remove filler 'uh'. Suggestion: Use precise verbs ('take' instead of 'get') and avoid fillers for clearer speech.

× I prefer views in in other countries because in other countries I get to get pictures in areas that I don't get to see often as compared to my country.

✓ I prefer views in other countries because I get to take pictures of places that I don't often see in my country.

Repeated 'in' is an error. 'Get to get pictures in areas' is wordy and unidiomatic; use 'take pictures of places'. Use 'often' before the verb for natural word order and compare properly with 'in my country'. Suggestion: Remove duplicate words, choose appropriate verbs ('take pictures of'), and place adverbs in natural positions.

× In other countries I get pictures. I mean in other countries I also get pictures with history and good memories attached to it.

✓ In other countries I take pictures that have historical significance and good memories attached to them.

'Get pictures' is informal; 'take pictures' is better. 'Attached to it' uses singular pronoun 'it' to refer to plural 'pictures'—use 'them'. Also clarify 'history' as 'historical significance' for better meaning. Suggestion: Ensure pronouns agree in number with their antecedents and choose precise nouns to convey meaning.