Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and organized: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Avoid repetition, filler words (uh), and grammar mistakes. Use linking words to connect ideas (for example, "I love taking photos of different views. For instance, I often photograph sunsets and mountain landscapes because I like their colors and shapes").

예시: I love taking photos of different views. For example, I often photograph sunsets and mountain landscapes because their colors and shapes are very striking. I also capture wildlife when I can, usually with my smartphone, to keep those moments as memories.

제안: Clarify and stay on one clear preference. Avoid conflicting statements (saying you prefer urban areas but praising countryside). Use a topic sentence stating your choice, then give two specific reasons with linking words ("Firstly... Secondly...").

예시: I prefer urban views because I enjoy photographing the busy streets and changing city scenes. Firstly, cities offer interesting movements and human activities to capture. Secondly, I can also visit nearby countryside sometimes for peaceful landscapes, which gives me variety.

제안: Keep answers natural and avoid repetition. Start with a clear statement of preference, then provide specific supporting details (examples of places, activities, or cultural features). Use linking words to connect sentences and limit to 2–4 sentences.

예시: I prefer views in my own country because I love its peaceful atmosphere and unique cultural character. For example, I often visit rural areas at sunrise to photograph traditional villages and colorful skies, which helps me relax and create lasting memories.

× Yours I love to take pictures of different different landscapes and mountains, sunsets, every sunset I captured in my smartphone and I love to capture the moments and keep them as memories.

✓ I love to take pictures of different landscapes and mountains, and I capture every sunset on my smartphone; I like to preserve those moments as memories.

The original sentence has extra word 'Yours' and repeated 'different', creating a confusing sentence structure (Grammar Problem Type ID 26). It also mixes tenses ('I captured' with present context) causing inconsistency (present tense preferred). Suggest removing 'Yours', delete duplicate 'different', use present simple 'capture' for habitual actions, and combine clauses with conjunctions or punctuation for clarity.

× I often photograph, uh, wildlife and natural landscapes which when I can since I find the colors and shapes were.

✓ I often photograph wildlife and natural landscapes whenever I can because I find the colors and shapes beautiful.

The original contains broken clause 'which when I can' and incorrect use of past verb 'were' (Grammar Problem Type ID 10 and 6). Replace with 'whenever I can' to indicate opportunity and use adjective 'beautiful' to describe colors and shapes, maintaining present tense for habitual action.

× I definitely prefer urban areas because I like the mountains, the landscape areas, the sunset and I love to capture the movements happening in the urban areas and the countryside areas are often give me the breath of fresh air and sometimes I also visit the of the beaten path and also.

✓ I definitely prefer urban areas because I enjoy capturing the activity there, but the countryside often gives me a breath of fresh air, and sometimes I visit off the beaten path.

This sentence is long and contains multiple structural problems (Grammar Problem Type ID 26). Errors include awkward listing, wrong verb form 'are often give', incorrect phrase 'visit the of the beaten path', and redundancy. Suggest splitting into parts, using correct verb 'gives', and the proper idiom 'off the beaten path'.

× I definitely prefer the views in my own country because I enjoy its peaceful atmosphere and cultural character.

✓ I definitely prefer the views in my own country because I enjoy its peaceful atmosphere and cultural character.

This sentence is grammatically correct in tense and structure, so no correction is needed. It correctly uses present simple to state a habitual preference (Grammar Problem Type ID 6).

× I especially love watching sunrise and sunsets.

✓ I especially love watching sunrises and sunsets.

Plural noun 'sunrise and sunsets' is inconsistent; use plural for both or the combined plural 'sunrises and sunsets' and capitalize not needed. Also 'watching' as gerund is correct here, so only noun form needed (Grammar Problem Type ID 10).

× I often go to countryside to relax and take photographs to capture special memories and I love to capture moments to into my memories and I love my country very, very much.

✓ I often go to the countryside to relax and take photographs to capture special memories, and I love my country very much.

Issues include missing article 'the' before 'countryside', awkward repetition 'capture moments to into my memories', and redundant phrases (Grammar Problem Type ID 26 and 22). Correction adds the article, removes redundancy, and clarifies purpose 'to capture special memories'.