Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is clear and relevant, with a direct topic sentence and a supporting example. To improve, remove filler words (e.g., “uh”), correct small grammar issues, and make sentences more concise and natural. Use one or two linking words to improve flow and avoid repetition (e.g., “so” once). Also vary vocabulary slightly (e.g., “landscapes,” “scenic views”).

예시: Yes, I do. I often take photos when I go out because I like to preserve memories of the places I visit. For example, I usually photograph cityscapes and seaside landscapes so I can look back on them later and share the best shots with my friends.

제안: The response answers the question directly and gives reasons, but has some grammar and phrasing errors and could be slightly more specific. Fix singular/plural errors (“rural areas”), use correct verb forms (“help” → “helps”), and add a linking phrase to connect ideas. Provide one concrete detail to strengthen the answer (e.g., types of scenery or activities).

예시: I prefer rural areas because I enjoy watching beautiful sunrises and sunsets and breathing fresh air. In particular, I like going for early morning walks among fields and trees because the peaceful atmosphere helps me relax and start the day refreshed.

제안: Your answer gives a personal reason and a specific example, which is good. However, there are several clarity and grammar issues: use plural/singular correctly (“views”), correct name/phrase confusion, and make the description clearer. Briefly explain what the place is and why it matters to you, using linking words to connect ideas. Avoid unclear phrases like “temple camp like call Uncle Ward Neil Siem Reap.”

예시: I prefer views in my own country, especially places like the temple complex in Siem Reap. That historic site is incredibly beautiful, and I feel a strong personal connection to it because I grew up visiting with my family and learning about its history.

× I often take pictures of the view when I go outside because I like to preserve memory of my places I will, uh, visit.

✓ I often take pictures of the view when I go outside because I like to preserve memories of the places I will visit.

Issues: 'preserve memory' should be plural 'preserve memories' (article/quantifier and noun form). 'my places I will, uh, visit' is ungrammatical and wordy; reorder to 'the places I will visit'. Remove filler 'uh'. This keeps future reference 'will visit' consistent and natural.

× For example, I always photograph cityscape or seaside view so I can look back on them later and share them with my friends.

✓ For example, I always photograph cityscapes or seaside views so I can look back on them later and share them with my friends.

Use plural nouns 'cityscapes' and 'seaside views' because photographing implies multiple instances (singular/plural agreement). Also 'photograph cityscape or seaside view' lacks articles; making them plural is most natural here.

× I prefer rural area because I love the beautiful sunrise and sunset and the overall natural atmosphere.

✓ I prefer rural areas because I love the beautiful sunrises and sunsets and the overall natural atmosphere.

Use plural 'rural areas' when speaking generally. For 'sunrise and sunset', plural forms 'sunrises and sunsets' better express repeated experiences. Maintain plural consistency.

× The air is much cleaner there so I often go there for early morning walk which help me relax and start the day refresh.

✓ The air is much cleaner there, so I often go there for an early morning walk which helps me relax and start the day refreshed.

Add article 'an' before 'early morning walk'. Verb agreement: 'which help' should be 'which helps' because the relative clause refers to 'walk' (singular). 'Start the day refresh' is incorrect; use past participle 'refreshed' to describe state.

× I prefer view in my own country, especially the temple camp like call Uncle Ward Neil Siem Reap.

✓ I prefer views in my own country, especially the temple complex called Angkor Wat near Siem Reap.

Multiple issues: use plural 'views in my own country' for general preference. The phrase 'temple camp like call Uncle Ward Neil Siem Reap' is ungrammatical and likely a misnaming. I corrected to 'temple complex called Angkor Wat near Siem Reap' as a plausible intended reference. Use 'called' to introduce name and correct place name capitalization.

× It is an incredibly beautiful historic site and I feel a strong personal connection to it because I grew up visiting with my family.

✓ It is an incredibly beautiful historic site and I feel a strong personal connection to it because I grew up visiting it with my family.

Minor issue: add object 'it' after 'visiting' ('visiting with my family' is ambiguous). Use 'grew up visiting it with my family' to clarify that you visited that site repeatedly while growing up.