Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct grammar; avoid repetition. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add one clear supporting detail using a linking word. Fix articles and verb forms and remove duplicate words.

예시: Yes, I do. I enjoy photographing different places because it helps me preserve memories; for example, when I look back at my photos I can remember how each place felt.

제안: Use correct singular/plural forms and more natural phrasing. Begin with a clear preference, then add one or two specific reasons using linking words like 'because' or 'for example'.

예시: I prefer rural views because I enjoy wide fields and small villages; for example, the fresh air and quiet help me clear my mind.

제안: Improve grammar and word choice (use 'interested in' not 'addicted in', plural forms, articles). Give a direct answer then a specific reason and an example, linked clearly.

예시: I prefer views in other countries because I'm very interested in different cultures and landscapes; for instance, I like photographing local markets when I travel abroad.

× I like photographing pictures of different places it it helps me preserve preserve memories of different place.

✓ I like photographing different places because it helps me preserve memories of different places.

The phrase 'photographing pictures' is redundant; 'photographing places' or 'taking pictures of places' is correct. Also 'it it' and duplicated 'preserve' are repetitions. Use 'because' to connect clauses. Use plural 'places' to match context. Ensure only one verb form 'photographing' is used correctly.

× When I look back I can remember how much places filled.

✓ When I look back, I can remember how much those places meant to me.

The original sentence is ungrammatical: 'how much places filled' is incorrect structure. Likely intended meaning is emotional value—use 'meant to me' or 'filled me' with object. Add a comma after introductory clause. Replace 'places filled' with 'those places meant to me' for clarity.

× I prefer viewing rural area.

✓ I prefer viewing rural areas.

Countable plural noun 'areas' should be used when speaking generally. The singular form 'rural area' requires an article or determiner (a/an/the). In general preference use plural 'rural areas.' Also 'viewing' is acceptable but 'visiting' or 'being in' could be more natural.

× For example, I like wide field and small village where I can breathe fresh air that helps me clear my mind.

✓ For example, I like wide fields and small villages where I can breathe fresh air, which helps me clear my mind.

Use plural 'fields' and 'villages' to speak generally. Add a comma before the nonrestrictive relative clause 'which helps me clear my mind.' 'Wide field' and 'small village' need plural forms to match general preference.

× I prefer view in other countries because I'm addicted in learning about different culture and landscapes.

✓ I prefer views in other countries because I'm addicted to learning about different cultures and landscapes.

Use plural 'views' when speaking generally. Preposition 'addicted to' is correct, not 'addicted in.' Use plural 'cultures' to match 'different.' Also 'in other countries' is fine; ensure plural nouns.

× When I travel in other country, I prefer to photograph local markets.

✓ When I travel to other countries, I prefer to photograph local markets.

Use preposition 'to' with 'travel' for destination: 'travel to a country' or 'travel to other countries.' Also use plural 'countries' to speak generally. Maintain consistent plural forms.