Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Улучшите грамматику и связность: используйте правильные формы (например, "the sort of person"), избегайте тавтологии и лишних фраз. Дайте чёткий топик-сентенс, затем одно-два поддерживающих пояснения с логическими связками. Исправьте смысловые ошибки ("I find it in" — бессмысленное выражение) и сократите ответ до 2–4 предложений.

예시: No, I don't usually take photos of landscapes because I'm the sort of person who doesn't notice scenery in detail. However, I admire people who do landscape photography because they have a good eye for composition and color. Sometimes I appreciate their photos when I see them online.

제안: Сделайте ответ более конкретным и добавьте причину с связочными словами. Начните с прямого ответа, затем объясните, почему, и приведите пример или сравнение. Избегайте повторов слов (например, "areas").

예시: It depends on my mood, but generally I prefer rural views because they feel more peaceful and natural. For example, I enjoy open fields and forests where I can relax and hear birds, while urban views are usually busy and noisy.

제안: Сделайте утверждение более точным и добавьте конкретные детали или примеры ландшафтов. Используйте связочные слова для плавного изложения и избегайте чрезмерных обобщений типа "everyone" без уточнения.

예시: I prefer views in my own country because Kazakhstan has very diverse landscapes, from steppes to mountains and deserts. For instance, I find the Tian Shan mountains especially beautiful and calming, so local scenery often helps me relax more than foreign views.

× No, I don't like taking pictures of different views because I'm the sort of people who don't pay attention to landscapes, but I find it in. But I find people who can do this really impressive.

✓ No, I don't like taking pictures of different views because I'm the sort of person who doesn't pay attention to landscapes. However, I find people who can do this really impressive.

The sentence uses the plural noun 'people' after the singular phrase 'the sort of', causing a mismatch; this is a pronoun/noun reference and agreement issue (use 'person' not 'people'). Also 'don't' should be 'doesn't' to agree with singular 'person' (subject-verb agreement). The phrase 'I find it in' is unclear and likely unnecessary, so it was removed and replaced with 'However' to connect ideas. Suggestion: use 'the sort of person' with 'doesn't' and avoid unclear fragments; link contrasting ideas with conjunctions like 'however'.

× Actually it depends on my mood. I prefer both of these, but I find rural areas more engaging than urban areas.

✓ Actually, it depends on my mood. I prefer both, but I find rural areas more engaging than urban areas.

The original is mostly correct but contains minor issues: add a comma after 'Actually' for natural speech flow and 'both of these' is wordy; 'both' is sufficient. This is a present tense context and verbs are correct. Suggestion: use concise phrasing and punctuation for clarity.

× I prefer views of my own country because landscapes in Kazakhstan are very diverse and it's suitable almost for every person.

✓ I prefer views of my own country because landscapes in Kazakhstan are very diverse and they are suitable for almost everyone.

The pronoun 'it' incorrectly refers to plural 'landscapes'; use 'they' to match plural noun. 'Almost for every person' is awkward; 'for almost everyone' is more natural. Suggestion: ensure pronouns agree in number with their antecedents and prefer natural collocations like 'for almost everyone'.

× And I'm sure that everyone can find their peace in my own country.

✓ I'm sure that everyone can find peace in my country.

'Their peace' is informal but acceptable; however, 'find peace' is more natural than 'find their peace'. Also 'my own country' is repetitive after 'my country'; drop 'own' for conciseness. Suggestion: use 'find peace' and avoid redundant words like 'own' when context makes possession clear.