Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 답변이 질문에 직접적으로 응답하였으나 문법 오류와 어순, 단어 선택 문제로 명확성이 떨어집니다. 문장을 간결하게 정리하고 핵심 이유를 하나 또는 두 개로 압축하세요. 또한 연결어(예: because, so, therefore)를 적절히 사용해 논리 흐름을 개선하고, ‘afford’ 같은 동사를 올바르게 활용하세요. 발음과 문장 마무리를 자주 연습해 자연스럽게 말하는 연습을 하세요.

예시: Not really. I don't take many pictures because camera equipment is too expensive for me. I'm a student living with my family, so we have many household expenses and I can't afford to buy a good camera.

제안: 응답이 선호를 분명히 했지만 표현의 정확성이 떨어지고 문법 오류와 어휘 선택 문제(예: 'many many car', 'wubborn')가 있습니다. 이유를 하나 또는 두 개로 구체적으로 설명하세요(예: 건축, 분위기, 편의시설). 연결어를 사용해 문장을 자연스럽게 이어주고, 형용사·명사 형태를 올바르게 사용하도록 연습하세요.

예시: I prefer urban areas because I enjoy skyscrapers and the busy city atmosphere. For example, cities offer many cafes and public transport options, which make it convenient to explore different neighborhoods.

제안: 의견은 잘 전달되었지만 문법(시제와 관사), 어순, 표현의 자연스러움이 부족합니다. 이유를 구체적으로 하나 또는 두 개 제시하고 연결어(However, because, so)를 사용해 대비와 근거를 명확히 하세요. ‘prefer’ 구문을 올바르게 사용하는 연습도 필요합니다.

예시: I like my own country, but I prefer views in other countries because I haven't experienced them yet. Traveling abroad would let me see different cultures and landscapes, which I think would be a valuable experience.

× I am student

✓ I am a student

Missing indefinite article 'a' before a singular countable noun. In English, singular countable nouns need an article or determiner. Add 'a' to make 'I am a student'. Suggestion: Remember to use 'a' or 'an' before singular countable nouns when speaking about one unspecific item/person.

× I live with my family and there's so many expenditure in home

✓ I live with my family and there are so many expenses at home

Several issues: 'expenditure' is an uncountable noun and unnatural here; the countable plural 'expenses' suits the meaning. 'There is/are' must agree with plural 'expenses' so use 'there are'. Use preposition 'at home' rather than 'in home'. Suggestion: Use 'there are' for plural nouns and 'at home' for location; use 'expenses' to refer to multiple costs.

× so I don't have any afford to buy camera

✓ so I can't afford to buy a camera

Incorrect verb/quantifier combination: 'have any afford' is wrong. Use the modal verb 'can' with 'afford' or 'cannot afford'. Also need the indefinite article 'a' before 'camera'. Suggestion: Use 'can't afford' or 'cannot afford' + infinitive to express inability to pay, and include 'a' before singular countable nouns.

× I've only live wubborn areas landscape

✓ I've only lived in suburban areas' landscapes

Wrong verb tense/form: 'live' should be past participle 'lived' after 'I've' (I have). 'Wubborn' appears to be a misspelling of 'suburban'. Need preposition 'in' and plural 'areas' and possessive/plural 'landscapes' to sound natural. Suggestion: Use past participle with present perfect and correct spelling 'suburban', and include 'in' before place nouns.

× I really love urban areas, skyscrapers and the many many car and many buses

✓ I really love urban areas: skyscrapers and the many cars and buses

Incorrect use of 'many many car' — 'car' should be plural 'cars' and 'many' repeated is informal and redundant. Remove extra 'many' and pluralize nouns. Use punctuation to list items smoothly. Suggestion: Use 'many cars and buses' and avoid unnecessary repetition.

× I have never experienced them and trying new thing is really valuable experience

✓ I have never experienced them and trying new things is a really valuable experience

'Trying new thing' should be plural 'new things' or 'a new thing'. Also add article 'a' before 'really valuable experience' or rephrase. Pronoun usage 'them' refers to 'countries' but keep parallel structure: 'I have never experienced them, and trying new things is a really valuable experience.' Suggestion: Use plural 'new things' and include 'a' before singular 'really valuable experience' or say 'is really valuable' without 'experience'.

× So you know I'm more prefer other countries view

✓ So you know I prefer views of other countries more

'I'm more prefer' is ungrammatical: 'prefer' is a stative verb and should not be used with 'am' + comparative. Reorder for natural emphasis: 'prefer...more' or 'prefer...to...'. Also use plural 'views' and preposition 'of' or 'in'. Suggestion: Use 'I prefer views of other countries more' or 'I prefer views in other countries to those in my own country.'