Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve fluency by reducing fillers (uh), use correct nouns (views, not wife), and make a clear two-sentence response: a topic sentence answering the question and one supporting detail or example. Keep sentences short and natural. Use linking words if adding details (for example, when, because).

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. For example, when I was a child I visited many places and loved photographing landscapes because it helped me remember the places.

제안: Answer directly and give a specific reason with a clear linking phrase (because/so). Replace vague words and avoid fillers. Limit to two or three clear sentences describing what you like about rural views (e.g., quiet, greenery, fresh air).

예시: I prefer rural areas because I enjoy natural scenery and quiet surroundings. For instance, green fields and forests make me feel relaxed and refreshed.

제안: State your preference clearly and give one specific reason with an example. Use correct vocabulary for places and views (e.g., country, trees, historical sites) and avoid repeating fillers. Keep to one topic sentence and one supporting sentence with a linking word (because/for example).

예시: I prefer views in my own country because I love its historical sites and natural landscapes. For example, in my country, there are many old monuments and beautiful forests that I enjoy visiting.

× I like taking picture, uh, of different wife, uh, when, uh, I was uh, child, uh, I went to uh, different place and uh, taking picture, uh, I enjoyed uh.

✓ I like taking pictures of different places. When I was a child, I went to different places and took pictures. I enjoyed it.

Original sentence has several singular/plural errors: 'picture' should be plural 'pictures' when speaking generally; 'wife' is incorrect and should be 'places' based on context; 'child' needs the article 'a' as 'a child'; 'place' should be plural 'places' to match 'different'. Also verb forms were inconsistent — 'taking picture' and 'taking picture, I enjoyed' needed restructuring. Suggestion: use plural nouns for general activities (pictures, places) and include articles for singular countable nouns ('a child').

× I prefer rural areas, uh, because of, uh, I like, uh, natural, uh, uh, habitats and uh, yeah, this, uh, feel, uh, this failed me, uh, happy and fresh and, uh.

✓ I prefer rural areas because I like natural habitats. They make me feel happy and refreshed.

The original mixes fragments and incorrect tense/word forms. 'This feel this failed me' is ungrammatical. Use present simple 'prefer' and 'like' for general preferences. 'Feel' should be 'feel happy and refreshed' — 'refreshed' is an adjective describing resulting state. Remove filler words and combine into clear sentences. Use 'they' to refer back to 'natural habitats' (plural).

× I prefer, uh, in, uh, my own country, in Kazoo, uh, I like, uh, making tree, uh, my country have uh, a lot of, uh, historical and natural place. Uh, so uh, I uh, prefer uh, these wives.

✓ I prefer my own country, Kazakhstan. I like its trees. My country has a lot of historical and natural places, so I prefer these views.

Multiple noun number errors: 'making tree' is incorrect — likely intended 'trees'; 'my country have' should be 'my country has' (subject-verb agreement); 'place' should be plural 'places' when referring to many; 'wives' is a wrong word choice for 'views' — use 'views'. Also proper country name suggested as 'Kazakhstan' if 'Kazoo' was a misspelling. Ensure subject-verb agreement and correct plural forms for countable nouns.