Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Shorten and focus your reply. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repeating similar ideas (e.g., monuments and historical places mentioned twice) and keep the answer within 3–4 sentences. Also correct small grammar slips (e.g., use “sometimes abroad” instead of “in other countries” too often).

예시: Yes — I enjoy photographing different views. For example, at home I often take pictures of historical monuments to show architectural details, and when I travel abroad I like candid shots of local people to learn about daily life.

제안: Make a clear, direct preference statement first, then support it with two specific reasons linked logically. Avoid contradicting phrases (you said you enjoy both then only explained rural). Fix word order and collocations (e.g., “man-made places,” “historical monuments,” “get to know the place”). Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

예시: I prefer photographing rural areas because they offer quieter scenes and authentic local life. For instance, I can capture farmers at work and traditional homes, which helps me tell a story about the place.

제안: Begin with a clear statement of preference and avoid unclear words (e.g., “wheels” seems incorrect). Give one clear reason and one brief example. Use linking words such as “because” and “however” correctly to contrast familiarity at home with curiosity abroad. Keep it concise (2–3 sentences).

예시: I prefer photographing views in other countries because I want to discover different cultures and architectural styles. Although my own country has many monuments that I know well, traveling abroad gives me fresh perspectives and new subjects to capture.

× Yes, I really enjoy taking pictures of different views, especially in my country and sometimes in other countries as well because I like to capture monuments and historical places or often pictures of people and different areas.

✓ Yes, I really enjoy taking pictures of different views, especially in my country and sometimes in other countries, because I like capturing monuments and historical places, and often pictures of people and different areas.

The original sentence mixes 'like to capture' and 'often pictures' awkwardly. When using 'enjoy' and 'like' to describe hobbies, the gerund (verb + -ing) form is idiomatic: 'like capturing'. Also punctuation and coordination were improved: add a comma before 'because' and connect similar objects with 'and'. This makes the sentence clearer and grammatically consistent.

× I believe that I enjoy both but my preference would be taking pictures in rural areas because I like to be connected with people and man made places, monument historical places and explore the area a little bit more to get to know that place more while taking pictures.

✓ I believe I enjoy both, but I prefer taking pictures in rural areas because I like being connected with people and with man-made and historical monuments, and I can explore the area a little more to get to know the place while I take pictures.

Sentence was long and had structural problems: unnecessary words ('that'), awkward phrase order, missing hyphen in 'man-made', and duplication ('more... more'). Use 'prefer' instead of 'my preference would be' for conciseness. Use gerunds ('being', 'taking') for activities. Separate items with 'and' and add commas for clarity.

× I prefer the wheels in other countries because I believe that my country has a wide cultural varieties of monuments and historical sites.

✓ I prefer the views in other countries because I believe that my country has a wide variety of cultural monuments and historical sites.

'Wheels' is likely a wrong word choice; the context calls for 'views'. 'A wide cultural varieties' is ungrammatical: 'varieties' is plural but preceded by 'a wide', so use 'a wide variety of' or 'wide cultural variety'. Also word order 'cultural monuments' is clearer than 'cultural varieties of monuments'.

× However, I'm familiar with these types of places in my country, so I prefer to explore and to get to know the other cultures and other views a little bit more.

✓ However, I'm familiar with these types of places in my country, so I prefer to explore and get to know other cultures and views a little more.

Redundant infinitive 'to explore and to get' is unnecessary; use parallel structure 'explore and get'. 'The other cultures and other views' is repetitive—drop the second 'other'. 'A little bit more' is informal and wordy; 'a little more' is more concise. Tense (present preference) is appropriate, so adjust wording for natural present-tense preference.