Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Start with a clear direct topic sentence, then give one or two concise supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition (e.g., "unsteady blur" and "unsteady" together). Also correct small grammar and collocation issues (use "when I take pictures they come out blurry"). Try to keep the answer to no more than 3–4 sentences.

예시: Not really. I don’t enjoy photography because I have an unsteady hand, so when I take pictures they often come out blurry. For that reason, I usually prefer to admire a view rather than try to photograph it.

제안: Begin with a clear topic sentence stating your preference, then add specific supporting details and a linking word. Correct vocabulary (say "mountains" not "mount") and avoid vague endings. Keep sentences concise and natural.

예시: I prefer rural views. I enjoy seeing mountains and rivers, which are rare in cities, so rural landscapes feel more peaceful and scenic to me.

제안: Give a direct answer first, then provide one clear reason with correct grammar and linking words. Avoid repeating the same sentence. Improve collocation: say "air pollution" and "it makes it difficult to see landmarks." Limit to 2–3 sentences for clarity.

예시: I prefer views in other countries. Because of high air pollution at home, visibility is often poor, which makes it hard to see landmarks clearly, so I enjoy traveling abroad for cleaner, clearer scenery.

× 'No, I'm not really into photography because I don't have a steady hand, so whenever I click pictures they are unsteady blur and that's why I don't like to click pictures.'

✓ 'No, I'm not really into photography because I don't have a steady hand, so whenever I click pictures they are an unsteady blur, and that's why I don't like to take pictures.'

'they are unsteady blur' is a subject-verb and article problem: the plural pronoun 'they' refers to 'pictures' but 'unsteady blur' needs an article and 'blur' is a noun requiring 'an'. Also 'click pictures' is informal and repeated; 'take pictures' is the more natural collocation. Suggestion: use 'they are an unsteady blur' or 'they are blurry' to fix agreement and article usage. Additionally, replace the second 'click pictures' with 'take pictures' to avoid repetition and use a common verb collocation.

× 'I prefer views in rural areas as I love to see the mount, see mountains, rivers and these are not present in cities so I love to.'

✓ 'I prefer views in rural areas because I love to see mountains, rivers, and the countryside, which are not present in cities, so I prefer them.'

'the mount' is incorrect because 'mount' alone is not commonly used to mean 'mountain'; use 'a mountain' or 'mountains'. The sentence also mixes singular and plural awkwardly and omits commas. 'and these are not present in cities so I love to' is incomplete and unclear: 'so I love to' should be 'so I prefer them' or similar. Suggestion: use plural nouns consistently ('mountains, rivers') and complete the clause ('so I prefer them'). Use 'because' for clearer cause.

× 'I prefer views in other countries as in our country there is a lot pollution and it's it makes it difficult to view any landmark or monument.'

✓ 'I prefer views in other countries because in our country there is a lot of pollution, and it makes it difficult to see any landmark or monument.'

'there is a lot pollution' is missing the preposition/article: it should be 'a lot of pollution' or 'much pollution'. The phrase 'it's it makes' has a repetition ('it's it'); remove the extra 'it'. Use 'see' rather than 'view' for natural collocation with 'landmark or monument'. Suggestion: write 'because in our country there is a lot of pollution, and it makes it difficult to see any landmark or monument.'