Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words (e.g., “uh”), and limit to 2–3 supportive sentences. Add a specific example or reason to enrich your answer and use linking words (e.g., "because", "so"). Also watch small grammar points: say "take my camera everywhere I go" instead of "to anywhere I go."

예시: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views. I usually take my camera everywhere I go because I like capturing interesting scenes, such as city skylines or mountain landscapes. For example, last month I photographed a sunset over the river and later shared it with friends.

제안: Structure the answer with a clear topic sentence and give specific reasons or examples. Correct grammar: say "My hometown is rural, so I prefer rural views" and avoid repetition. Use linking words ("because", "so", "for example") and be specific about what you like (e.g., "fields, old houses, open skies").

예시: I prefer rural views because I grew up in the countryside and enjoy open fields and traditional houses. For example, I like photographing old stone barns and wide green meadows, which feel peaceful and less crowded than cities.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence and follow with a specific reason and example. Correct grammar and vocabulary: say "I prefer views in other countries" and explain why (unique architecture, different light). Avoid unclear words like "debuted" and fillers; use linking words such as "because" and "for example."

예시: I prefer views in other countries because they often offer different architecture and atmospheres. For example, when I visited Italy I was amazed by the historic streets and colourful buildings, which made the landscapes unforgettable.

× I like to take pictures of various views and I usually, uh, take my camera to anywhere I go and take beautiful pictures.

✓ I like taking pictures of various views, and I usually take my camera anywhere I go to capture beautiful pictures.

Using 'like to take' is acceptable, but 'like taking' is more natural here; 'take my camera to anywhere I go' is incorrect preposition/word order. Replace 'to anywhere I go' with 'anywhere I go' and use 'to capture' or 'to take' after 'go'. Also remove filler 'uh' for clarity.

× My my hometown is rural areas so I think I love rural areas and I prefer to take photo of that bills and I love when I am in the rural areas.

✓ My hometown is a rural area, so I think I love rural areas and I prefer to take photos of the fields, and I love being in rural areas.

Multiple plural/singular errors: 'My hometown is rural areas' mixes singular subject with plural complement; use 'a rural area' or 'rural'. 'take photo' should be plural 'take photos' or 'take a photo'. 'that bills' is incorrect word choice; likely 'the hills' or 'the fields'—here corrected to 'the fields'. 'I love when I am in the rural areas' is wordy; 'I love being in rural areas' is natural.

× I think I prefer other countries to my country. When I visited it, Italy, Italy, I really shocked and debuted is unbelievable and unforgettable memories.

✓ I think I prefer other countries to my country. When I visited Italy, I was really shocked and delighted; it was an unbelievable and unforgettable experience.

Tense and verb form errors: 'When I visited it, Italy, Italy' is redundant and awkward—use 'When I visited Italy'. 'I really shocked' is passive or wrong form; use 'I was really shocked' or 'I was really surprised'. 'debuted' is incorrect word choice; likely meant 'delighted'. Also 'is unbelievable and unforgettable memories' mixes tenses and noun forms; use 'it was an unbelievable and unforgettable experience' or 'they were unbelievable and unforgettable memories.'