Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make your answer more natural and precise: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, correct grammar (singular/plural), and add one specific detail or reason using a linking phrase. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, I love taking pictures, especially of natural scenes. For example, I often photograph sunsets and forests because they change constantly and capture strong colours. This helps me preserve memories of trips and relaxing moments.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence, correct grammar (use singular/plural and articles), avoid filler words, and add a specific reason with a linking word. Provide one brief supporting detail to strengthen your answer.

예시: I prefer views in rural areas because they are calmer and cleaner. For instance, the quiet countryside and open fields let me enjoy nature without the noise of traffic, which makes outdoor photography more pleasant.

제안: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers, and explain why with a specific reason or example. Use a linking phrase to connect the preference and the reason. Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

예시: I prefer views in my own country more than in other countries because I know the best spots and they feel familiar. For example, I often visit a nearby lake that changes with the seasons and allows me to take photos throughout the year.

× I love taking pictures, especially nature, and I think picture is a thing where I can catch the moment and the memory.

✓ I love taking pictures, especially of nature, and I think a picture is something that lets me capture a moment and its memory.

Errors: missing preposition 'of' after 'especially' and article 'a' before 'picture'; use of 'picture is a thing where' is awkward and ungrammatical; 'catch the moment and the memory' should be 'capture a moment and its memory'. Suggestions: add 'of' to link 'especially' with 'nature', use the indefinite article 'a' before singular 'picture', replace 'thing where' with 'something that lets me' or 'a way to', and use 'capture' and a possessive 'its' for clarity.

× I prefer views in rural areas cause umm rural area are calm and clean, there is no hassle of sound system and yeah that's it.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because rural areas are calm and clean; there is no noisy traffic or loud sounds, and that's it.

Errors: 'cause' is informal; use 'because'. 'rural area are' has subject-verb disagreement and article misuse: plural 'areas' requires 'are'. Also 'there is no hassle of sound system' is unidiomatic. Suggestions: use 'rural areas are' for agreement, replace informal 'cause' with 'because', and use a natural phrase like 'no noisy traffic or loud sounds' or 'no noise from loudspeakers' depending on meaning.

× I prefer both but umm my country is the most.

✓ I prefer both, but I prefer my country the most.

Errors: sentence is incomplete and awkward. 'my country is the most' lacks an adjective ('preferred' or 'popular') and proper structure. Suggestions: make the comparison explicit: 'I prefer my country the most' or 'I prefer my country the most because...'. Use a comma before 'but' when joining clauses.