Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more fluent and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words (uh, I want to say), correct grammar (use gerunds/infinitives correctly), and add one specific detail with a linking phrase. Aim for 2–3 sentences only.

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because they help me preserve memories. For example, when I visit a seaside town I always photograph the sunset so I can look back on the atmosphere and colors later.

제안: Give a clear direct answer, use correct vocabulary (rural areas, nature lover), avoid repetition, and link reasons with a connector. Include one specific example to support your preference.

예시: I prefer views in rural areas because I’m a nature lover and enjoy peaceful landscapes. For instance, hiking in the countryside lets me see fields and forests, which helps me relax and forget city stress.

제안: Answer directly and grammatically: use singular/plural correctly (a new country, other countries), avoid vague phrasing, and give a clear reason plus a brief example. Keep it within 2–3 concise sentences.

예시: I prefer views in other countries because I enjoy discovering new places. For example, visiting Japan last year allowed me to see different landscapes and cultural sights that I had never experienced at home.

× Yes, I like taking, I like to taking pictures of different views because I, uh, I want to say, uh, save it for my memories and I it can be really review in future.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different views because I want to save them for my memories and I can really review them in the future.

The sentence uses the incorrect form 'to taking' (verb + to should be followed by the base form) and repeats phrases. 'Save it for my memories' has incorrect pronoun and article usage; 'memories' is plural and requires 'them'. 'It can be really review' mixes modal structure and verb forms; use 'I can really review them'. Suggestions: use 'like taking' or 'like to take' (both correct), use plural pronouns to match plural noun 'pictures', and use correct modal + base verb structure (can + review).

× I prefer to view rural area areas because I am natural Rover, nature Rover.

✓ I prefer rural areas because I am a nature lover.

'Rural area areas' repeats words and is redundant. 'Nature Rover' is incorrect word choice; the correct noun is 'nature lover'. Also article 'a' is required before a singular countable noun. Suggestion: remove redundancy and use the established collocation 'nature lover'.

× So I might go to I might see natural beauties like greenery, landscapes and it may be helps to relax me.

✓ So I might go there to see natural beauty like greenery and landscapes, and it may help me relax.

'Go to I might see' is disfluent and has extra words; use 'go there to see' or 'go to see'. 'Natural beauties' is awkward; 'natural beauty' is uncountable in this context. 'It may be helps' mixes modal or auxiliary forms incorrectly; use 'it may help' (modal + base verb) and 'help me relax' is the natural word order. Suggestion: streamline the clause and use correct modal + base verb and uncountable noun forms where appropriate.

× I prefer to visit new country or maybe other countries because there are in my past I visited my country many times and I also visited many other countries.

✓ I prefer to visit new countries or other countries because in the past I visited my country many times and I have also visited many other countries.

'New country' needs plural 'new countries' or an article 'a new country'. The phrase 'there are in my past' is incorrect; correct expression is 'in the past'. Also tense consistency: 'I visited my country many times' is fine, but when connecting past experiences to present preference, present perfect 'I have also visited' is appropriate. Suggestion: use plural or add an article for 'country', correct time expression to 'in the past', and use present perfect for life experiences where relevant.

× So I think new new destination will be good for.

✓ So I think a new destination would be good.

The sentence repeats 'new' and ends abruptly with 'for' that lacks an object. 'Would be' is more polite/conditional than 'will be' when expressing preference. Also article 'a' is required before 'new destination'. Suggestion: remove duplicate words, include the proper article, and complete the thought without an unnecessary preposition.