Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Cải thiện tính tự nhiên, ngữ pháp và tính mạch lạc. Tránh dùng các cụm từ không chính xác như "wanna text some photos" (nên là "take photos" hoặc "text photos") và sửa thì sai (ví dụ "I wanted to" không phù hợp với hiện tại). Nên mở đầu bằng một câu chủ đề rõ ràng, sau đó dùng 1–2 câu bổ sung cụ thể về lý do và hành động (ví dụ: lưu giữ kỷ niệm, chia sẻ với bạn bè). Hạn chế số câu tối đa 4–5 câu và dùng liên từ phù hợp (because, so, to).

예시: Yes, I do. When I travel to new places I often take photos to remember the scenery because it helps me capture special moments. I also send some pictures to friends who couldn't come so they can see the views. This way I keep memories and share experiences with others.

제안: Câu trả lời có ý tưởng rõ ràng nhưng cần rút gọn để tự nhiên hơn và tránh lặp từ (ví dụ hai lần "prefer"). Nên mở bằng câu trả lời trực tiếp, sau đó giải thích với 1–2 chi tiết cụ thể và dùng liên từ như "however" hoặc "but" để làm rõ sự so sánh. Tránh tiếng lòng vòng như "Uh" và các mệnh đề dài không cần thiết.

예시: I prefer urban areas. Although I grew up in the countryside and still enjoy the fresh air and peaceful atmosphere, I like cities more because they offer more convenience and a wider range of activities such as museums and cafés.

제안: Cần sửa lỗi từ vựng và ngữ pháp (ví dụ "skycroppers" → "skyscrapers", "convenience amenities" → "convenient amenities"), và xóa câu cuối không rõ nghĩa. Trả lời nên gồm một câu chủ đề rõ ràng, một hoặc hai câu giải thích cụ thể (nêu ví dụ rõ ràng và liên quan), sử dụng liên từ để kết nối ý. Tránh câu mơ hồ hoặc lỗi cấu trúc như "Where can we can realize how to work?".

예시: I prefer views in my own country. I currently live in Hanoi and I enjoy its modern skyline with many skyscrapers and convenient amenities nearby. For example, there are numerous cafés in parks where people can relax or work outdoors.

× Yes, definitely when I travel to new places and I feel surprised about the view of this place so I wanted to and so I wanna text some photos about this view to remember about the trip and give my friends who don't go to.

✓ Yes, definitely. When I travel to new places and I am impressed by the view, I want to take some photos of it to remember the trip and to show my friends who couldn't go.

The original sentence contains incorrect verb forms and colloquial contractions. 'Feel surprised about' is unnatural; use 'am impressed by'. 'Wanted to' mixes past with present intention; use present simple 'want' to match the general habit. 'Wanna' is informal; use 'want to'. 'Text some photos' is incorrect verb collocation; use 'take some photos' (to capture images) and 'show my friends' (to give them the images). Use consistent verb tenses and proper infinitive forms. Suggestions: use present simple for habitual actions, replace informal contractions, and use correct verb collocations (take photos, show friends).

× Uh, for me, I prefer, I actually came from a rural area, so I appreciate the fresh air here with the peaceful atmosphere, but I prefer urban areas because of their convenience and variety of activities.

✓ Uh, for me, I prefer urban areas. I actually come from a rural area, so I appreciate the fresh air and the peaceful atmosphere there, but I prefer urban areas because of their convenience and variety of activities.

The sentence mixes past and present inappropriately. 'I actually came from a rural area' sounds like a past action; use 'I actually come from a rural area' to state origin. Also clarify contrast by stating preference first or restructuring. Suggestions: use present simple for permanent facts (origins, general preferences) and keep tense consistent across contrasting statements.

× I now live in Hanoi, the center of Vietnam, and I enjoy the modern sky with many skycroppers and the convenience amenities nearby.

✓ I now live in Hanoi, the center of Vietnam, and I enjoy the modern skyline with many skyscrapers and the convenient amenities nearby.

The original uses incorrect nouns and adjective forms: 'modern sky' should be 'modern skyline'. 'Skycroppers' is a misspelling/incorrect word; the correct noun is 'skyscrapers'. 'Convenience amenities' is ungrammatical; use 'convenient amenities'. Suggestion: choose correct noun forms and adjective-noun collocations ('modern skyline', 'skyscrapers', 'convenient amenities').

× For example, there's a lot of cafes in parks. Where can we can realize how to work?

✓ For example, there are a lot of cafes in parks where we can work or relax.

There are two problems: subject-verb agreement and awkward clause structure. 'There's a lot of cafes' is incorrect; with plural 'cafes' use 'there are a lot of cafes'. The second sentence 'Where can we can realize how to work?' is ungrammatical and unclear; likely intended meaning is that these cafes provide spaces to work, so combine into a relative clause: 'cafes in parks where we can work or relax.' Suggestions: ensure subject-verb agreement for 'there is/there are' and replace unclear phrasing with a clear relative clause.