Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Cải thiện ngữ pháp và trật tự câu để trả lời rõ ràng hơn; tránh lặp từ và nói lỏng lẻo. Cụ thể: (1) Mở đầu bằng một câu chủ đề rõ ràng, trực tiếp trả lời câu hỏi; (2) Sử dụng cấu trúc câu hoàn chỉnh (động từ chia đúng, danh từ số nhiều/đơn); (3) Thêm chi tiết cụ thể ngắn gọn để giải thích lý do; (4) Dùng từ nối phù hợp để câu mạch lạc. Ví dụ cần tối đa 3-4 câu, không lặp từ như “actually” nhiều lần.

예시: Yes, I do. I enjoy photographing landscapes such as mountains and oceans because they make me feel calm. I often take pictures to remember beautiful places, and I look at them when I'm stressed to relax.

제안: Cải thiện ngữ pháp so sánh và phát âm các danh từ; tránh cấu trúc lủng củng. Cụ thể: (1) Trả lời ngắn gọn rõ ràng với câu chủ đề "I prefer... because..."; (2) Sử dụng so sánh đúng (better than) và danh từ số nhiều/đếm được đúng (buildings); (3) Thêm một chi tiết cụ thể để minh họa (ví dụ: skyline, parks, rivers); (4) Dùng liên từ chuyển ý (however) đúng chỗ và chỉ dùng 1-2 câu bổ sung.

예시: I prefer urban views because the skyline is more varied, with high-rise buildings and modern architecture. However, I also appreciate rural scenery for its peacefulness and greenery.

제안: Cải thiện độ rõ ràng và logic của ý, tránh dùng cụm từ lủng củng và lặp lại. Cụ thể: (1) Trả lời trực tiếp: "I prefer views in my country because..."; (2) Giải thích rõ vì sao: nêu đặc điểm cụ thể (ví dụ: landscapes, cultural sites, atmosphere); (3) Tránh diễn đạt mơ hồ như "spiritual shoulder"; thay bằng từ ngữ dễ hiểu; (4) Giữ 2-3 câu ngắn gọn, dùng từ nối nếu cần.

예시: I prefer views in my own country because they feel more peaceful and familiar. For example, the local landscapes and cultural sites remind me of home and give me a sense of comfort.

× Well, actually I really love taking photo of various views said that mountain, oceans.

✓ Well, actually I really love taking photos of various views, such as mountains and oceans.

The noun 'photo' should be plural 'photos' because it refers to multiple items; 'mountain, oceans' mixes singular and plural and should use plural for both or parallel structure: 'mountains and oceans'. Also 'said that' is unnecessary and incorrect here; replace with 'such as' to introduce examples. Suggestion: use parallel plural nouns and 'such as' for examples.

× Well, actually they give me a very calm feeling.

✓ They give me a very calm feeling.

The original sentence has an unnecessary leading filler 'Well, actually' which is acceptable in speech but for clarity can be removed. Grammatically the sentence is fine otherwise. Keep subject-verb agreement 'They give'. Suggestion: in formal answers reduce fillers.

× Therefore I have to take the picture to remember all those place and when I I'm stressed, I can.

✓ Therefore I have to take pictures to remember all those places, and when I'm stressed, I can look at them.

Multiple issues: 'the picture' should be plural 'pictures' because 'all those places' implies many; 'place' should be plural 'places'; 'when I I'm stressed, I can' is fragmented and missing the action—add 'look at them'. Also remove extra 'I'. Suggestion: ensure number agreement and complete the clause with a verb phrase.

× Urban areas have a better views than rural other ones.

✓ Urban areas have better views than rural ones.

Use plural 'views' and remove 'a' which incorrectly makes 'views' singular; 'rural other ones' is awkward—use 'rural ones'. Suggestion: omit unnecessary articles when comparing plural nouns and use concise comparative structure.

× It's because in the urban area you can see many high rise building with various version of building 2.

✓ It's because in urban areas you can see many high-rise buildings with various designs.

Do not use 'the' before 'urban area' when speaking generally—use plural 'urban areas'. 'High rise building' should be plural 'high-rise buildings'; 'various version of building 2' is unclear—likely 'various designs'. Use hyphen in 'high-rise'. Suggestion: use plural and correct compound adjective form and clearer vocabulary.

× However in rural area you can just see the natural trees and some water.

✓ However, in rural areas you can just see natural trees and some bodies of water.

'Rural area' should be plural 'rural areas' when speaking generally; 'the natural trees' can be 'natural trees' and 'some water' is vague—'some bodies of water' or 'streams' is clearer. Suggestion: match plural forms and choose specific nouns.

× Well, I would say in my consider will wills are very various.

✓ Well, I would say that in my country the views are very varied.

The original is unintelligible: 'in my consider will wills' is incorrect. Likely intended meaning is 'in my country the views are very varied.' Use 'that' to introduce clause and 'varied' for adjective. Suggestion: restructure sentence to a clear subject and adjective.

× Therefore I think I I would definitely love the view in my country because it's really peaceful in not just a normal view.

✓ Therefore I would definitely love the views in my country because they're really peaceful and not just ordinary scenes.

Duplicate 'I I' should be 'I would' or omit extra pronoun. 'The view' should be plural 'the views' to match general meaning; 'it's really peaceful in not just a normal view' is ungrammatical—replace with 'they're really peaceful and not just ordinary scenes.' Suggestion: remove duplicate words, ensure pronoun-number agreement, and use clear adjectives.

× It's like it's like our spiritual shoulder.

✓ It's like a spiritual refuge for us.

Repeating 'it's like it's like' is redundant; 'our spiritual shoulder' is not natural idiom—'a spiritual refuge' or 'a spiritual solace' fits better. Suggestion: avoid repetition and use idiomatic expressions.