Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Clarify your main idea, avoid redundancy, and add a brief reason or example. Keep answers natural and within 3–4 sentences. Use linking words like because or so to connect ideas.

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because photography helps me remember places and moments. For example, I often photograph cityscapes at sunset to capture the colors and atmosphere, so I can use them later for personal projects or social media.

제안: Respond directly with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and give one supporting reason. Use a linking phrase to contrast preferences if necessary.

예시: I prefer urban views because I enjoy the energy and architectural details of cities. However, I also appreciate rural landscapes for their peacefulness, so I sometimes travel to the countryside to photograph nature.

제안: Be concise and avoid repeating words. State your preference clearly, give specific examples of landscapes, and use linking words like for example or such as to add detail.

예시: I prefer views in my own country because it has diverse scenery, such as the Himalayan mountains, rolling hills, and arid plains. For example, I often visit foothill villages to photograph terraced fields and mountain sunsets.

× I love taking pictures of different views and I want to for the future news whenever I want to use them.

✓ I love taking pictures of different views and I want to keep them for future use whenever I need them.

The original sentence misuses 'for the future news' and has awkward phrasing. This is a future-intention idea; use 'keep them for future use' to express saving photos for later. Also 'whenever I want to use them' is simplified to 'whenever I need them' for clarity. Suggested improvement: plan the verb phrase for future intention (want to keep) and use correct noun phrases ('future use' not 'future news').

× I love the views of both area but I love to I am from urban areas so that I love to like love to enjoy the views of urban areas mostly.

✓ I love the views of both areas, but I am from an urban area, so I mostly enjoy views of urban areas.

Multiple plural/singular and article errors: 'both area' should be 'both areas' (plural). 'I am from urban areas' should be 'I am from an urban area' (singular with article) because the speaker refers to their own origin. The original contains redundancy and broken structure ('I love to I am from...'). Suggestion: simplify and order ideas clearly: state preference for both areas, then explain origin and tendency. Suggested improvement: separate ideas into clauses and use correct pluralization and articles.

× I love my country's view because my country is very very rich in natural beauty and I have my country contain the views of beautiful beautiful Himalayan regions and content with hill, hill reasons and dry regions we have.

✓ I love my country's scenery because my country is very rich in natural beauty and contains beautiful Himalayan regions, hills, and dry areas.

Several article and word-choice errors: 'my country's view' is better as 'my country's scenery'. Repetition 'very very' and 'beautiful beautiful' removed. 'I have my country contain' is ungrammatical; use 'contains' (third person singular). 'hill, hill reasons' is unclear — likely 'hills'. Use parallel noun list: 'Himalayan regions, hills, and dry areas.' This corrects subject-verb agreement and article/word-choice issues and clarifies meaning. Suggested improvement: keep verbs consistent with the subject (my country contains) and list geographic features in parallel form.