Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more grammatically accurate and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers (uh, umm), correct verb forms, and give specific supporting details using linking words. For example, say when and what you photograph, and why you enjoy it.

예시: Yes, I do. I usually take photos when I go on short trips or travel abroad, especially of natural scenes like jungles, animals, and beaches, because I enjoy capturing peaceful landscapes and wildlife for memories.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence and improve vocabulary and grammar. Replace vague phrases ("modern system", "sky craps", "mother building") with precise words like "modern architecture" and "skyscrapers." Use linking words to expand briefly on reasons.

예시: I prefer urban views because I enjoy modern architecture and skyscrapers; moreover, the city skyline and illuminated buildings often look spectacular at night, which makes them great subjects for photography.

제안: Provide a direct answer with specific reasons and correct grammar. Use linking words to add contrast or detail (e.g., "because", "however"). Mention particular places or features that make your country appealing.

예시: I prefer views in my own country because we have many modern buildings and vibrant urban areas; for example, our waterfront district and recent skyscraper projects offer striking views that I rarely see elsewhere.

× Yes, Sir, I always taking a picture, uh, if I go to umm, short trip or uh, travel to other countries, uh, unlike uh, take a picture, uh, to nature, jungle, animals and beaches.

✓ Yes, Sir, I always take pictures when I go on short trips or travel to other countries. I like taking pictures of nature, jungles, animals and beaches.

The original uses 'always taking' where the correct simple present is 'always take' for habitual actions (Grammar ID 8 and 6). Also plural 'pictures' is needed for general activity (Grammar ID 1). 'If I go to short trip' is incorrect; use 'when I go on short trips' or 'on a short trip' (preposition and article). 'Unlike' is misused and removed. Use parallel gerund phrase 'taking pictures of...' to list subjects. Suggestions: use simple present for habits, pluralize countable nouns for general activities, and use correct prepositions ('on short trips').

× I prefer views in urban eras, uh, because, uh, I like modern system and I like to sky craps and uh, mother building are huge.

✓ I prefer views in urban areas because I like modern systems and skyscrapers, and many buildings are huge.

Several word choice and adjective errors: 'eras' should be 'areas' (spelling), 'modern system' is vague; 'modern systems' or 'modern architecture' works (Grammar ID 13). 'Sky craps' is incorrect; correct form is 'skyscrapers' (compound noun). 'Mother building are huge' is incorrect subject and verb; likely intended 'many buildings are huge'—this fixes subject-verb agreement and meaning (Grammar IDs 12 and 27). Suggestions: use correct vocabulary, pluralize where general reference is intended, and ensure subjects and verbs agree.

× They are very beautiful.

✓ They are very beautiful.

Sentence is grammatically correct. It correctly uses the plural pronoun 'They' with the plural predicate 'are' and the adjective 'beautiful' (no change needed). Included for completeness to show accuracy.

× I prefer views in my own country because in my country we have many modern building and modern urban.

✓ I prefer views in my own country because we have many modern buildings and modern urban areas.

'Many' requires a plural noun: use 'buildings' not 'building' (Grammar ID 1). 'Modern urban' is incomplete; use 'modern urban areas' or 'modern urban development' to be grammatical (Grammar ID 13). Suggestions: match quantifiers with plural nouns and complete adjective+noun phrases.