Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Cevabınızı daha doğal ve akıcı hale getirmek için tekrar eden kelimelerden kaçının ve kısa bir konu cümlesiyle başlayıp sonra bir veya iki açıklayıcı detay ekleyin. Ayrıca "from different views" yerine daha doğal ifadeler (ör. "from different angles" veya "of different scenes") kullanın. Cümlenizin akışını düzeltmek için bağlaçlar ekleyin ve örnek verin.

예시: Yes, I enjoy photographing different scenes because each angle reveals a new perspective. For example, shooting a park from ground level versus from above can highlight textures and patterns that aren’t obvious at first.

제안: Cevap tutarsızlığı ve mantık hatası var; "urban areas" tercih ettiğinizi söylerken neden olarak köyleri (villages) etkileyici bulduğunuzu söylemişsiniz. Önce açık bir konu cümlesi verin, sonra nedenlerini mantıklı bir şekilde açıklayın ve karşılaştırma yaparken bağlantı sözcükleri kullanın.

예시: I prefer urban views because I like the energy and architecture of cities. However, rural areas can be peaceful and scenic, so sometimes I enjoy both depending on my mood.

제안: Cümleye alakasız bir gözlemle başlamışsınız (‘Rainy and cold today’)—bu tür gözlemler soruyla bağlantılı değilse çıkartılmalı. Önce doğrudan bir cevap verin, sonra nedenlerinizi belirgin ve özgül detaylarla destekleyin. Ayrıca duygusal ifadeleri somut örneklerle pekiştirin.

예시: I usually prefer views in my own country because I’m familiar with its landscapes and cultural landmarks. For instance, I enjoy photographing the historic old town and coastal cliffs at sunset, which remind me of home.

× I like taking pictures from different views because it's it's not the same perspective that it shows.

✓ I like taking pictures of different views because each one shows a different perspective.

The original sentence uses 'from different views' and 'it's it's not the same perspective that it shows', which is awkward and contains a repeated word. Use 'of different views' (preposition correction) and rephrase to 'each one shows a different perspective' to make the subject clear and concise. Also remove the duplicated 'it's'. Suggestions: replace 'from' with 'of', remove duplication, and use 'each one' as the subject for clarity.

× I prefer views in urban areas because the villages are so impressive to me.

✓ I prefer views in urban areas because the buildings are so impressive to me.

The student contrasts urban areas with 'villages', which is plural and semantically mismatched. If they mean urban features, 'buildings' or 'cityscapes' suits urban areas. This fixes number and meaning by matching the subject to urban context. Suggestion: use 'buildings' or 'cityscapes' to refer to impressive urban features.

× Rainy and cold today, I usually prefer the views in my country because my country is so beautiful to me.

✓ It's rainy and cold today, but I usually prefer the views in my country because my country is very beautiful to me.

The original begins with 'Rainy and cold today,' which is a sentence fragment lacking a verb. Adding 'It's' completes the clause. Also add 'but' to contrast today's weather with the usual preference. Replace 'so beautiful to me' with 'very beautiful to me' for natural emphasis. Suggestion: always include a verb in the introductory clause and use connectors like 'but' when contrasting ideas.