Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammar and fluency: use correct verb forms and reduce hesitations. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Keep it to a maximum of 4–5 concise sentences. For example, say why you take photos (to remember moments), how you organize them (albums or digital folders), or give a brief example of a memorable photo.

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking photographs of different views because they help me preserve memories. For instance, when I travel I store photos in an album so I can easily look back and remember what I did. Also, they capture the mood of the trip and remind me of specific moments, such as watching a sunset on the beach.

제안: Work on clarity, accuracy and coherence: give a direct topic sentence stating your preference, then support it with specific reasons using linking words (for example, because / whereas). Avoid repetition and incorrect comparisons (e.g. Sky Tower is in Auckland, Space Needle is in Seattle). Provide one concrete example to illustrate your point.

예시: I prefer rural views because they feel more peaceful and varied. For example, countryside landscapes often include fields, forests and quiet lakes, whereas city skylines can look similar with tall towers and busy streets. Therefore, rural scenery gives me a stronger sense of relaxation and uniqueness.

제안: Reduce repetition and correct common errors: give a clear statement, then support it with one or two specific reasons and an example. Use correct prepositions (abroad, not aboard) and avoid repeating the same idea. Mention a particular destination abroad you like to contrast with home.

예시: I prefer views in other countries because my country is quite small and has fewer tourist spots. For example, I enjoy visiting neighboring countries with diverse landscapes like mountains and historic towns that we don't have at home. As a result, traveling abroad offers me more variety and new experiences.

× Yes, I do like take pictures.

✓ Yes, I do like taking pictures.

After the verbs 'like' and the emphatic 'do like', the following verb should be in the -ing form (gerund). Use 'taking' instead of the base form 'take'. Suggestion: Practice verb patterns with 'like', 'love', 'enjoy' followed by -ing (e.g., 'I enjoy taking photos').

× So I wanna make it as a part of my memory when I, umm, looking back, I can have some recall of what I'm doing there and have a sense of umm, what happened when I was in the trip or something.

✓ So I want to make it part of my memory so that when I look back I can recall what I was doing there and have a sense of what happened on the trip.

Multiple errors: 'wanna' is informal — use 'want to'. 'Make it as a part' is unidiomatic — use 'make it part'. The clause 'when I, umm, looking back' needs a finite verb: 'when I look back' (present) or 'when I looked back' depending on meaning; here present tense for reflecting is appropriate. 'Have some recall' is awkward; 'recall' as a verb fits: 'I can recall'. 'What I'm doing there' should match past context: use 'what I was doing there'. 'In the trip' uses incorrect preposition: use 'on the trip'. Suggestions: break long sentences into shorter ones, use correct verb forms (look back / looked back) and appropriate prepositions (on the trip).

× I prefer the views in rural areas cause the the views in city are basically the same thing 'cause we have the maybe kind of tower maybe in New Zealand like Sky tower in Seattle Space Needle and they were just look the same and they don't have a different kind of feeling.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because the views in the city are basically the same; for example, many cities have towers like the Sky Tower or the Seattle Space Needle, and they just look similar and don't have a different feeling.

Problems: 'cause' is informal — use 'because'. 'in city' needs the definite article: 'in the city'. 'the maybe kind of tower maybe in New Zealand like Sky tower in Seattle Space Needle' is ungrammatical and confusing; clarify with 'for example' and correct tower names and articles. 'They were just look the same' mixes tenses and verbs; use 'they just look similar'. Suggestions: use articles with 'city', restructure long sentence, and avoid repetition ('maybe').

× Definitely other countries cause my country there's only a few views 'cause our country is so small and most of people would just go aboard and and take a trip there.

✓ Definitely other countries, because in my country there are only a few sights; it is so small and most people just go abroad to take trips.

Errors: 'cause' informal → 'because'. 'my country there's only a few views' has subject-verb agreement and word choice issues: use 'in my country there are only a few sights' (plural agreement and 'sights' or 'places to see' is better than 'views'). 'most of people' should be 'most people'. 'would just go aboard' is wrong: 'abroad' (meaning overseas) is correct, and 'would' is unnecessary here; 'just go abroad' is sufficient. Suggestions: use correct vocabulary ('sights', 'abroad'), ensure subject-verb agreement ('there are'), and avoid unnecessary modals when stating facts.