Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and fluent: start with a clear topic sentence, remove filler words, correct grammar (singular/plural, verb forms), and add one specific supporting detail using a linking phrase. Aim for 2–4 sentences and avoid repetition.

예시: Yes, I do. I love taking landscape photos whenever I travel because they help me remember special moments and places. For example, I often photograph sunsets at the beach and later share the best shots with friends on social media, which makes the memories feel more meaningful.

제안: Give a direct answer, fix grammar and word choice, and include a clear reason with a specific example using a linking word (e.g., 'because' or 'for example'). Keep it to 2–3 sentences and avoid repetition.

예시: I prefer rural views because they have wide open landscapes and less pollution. For example, I enjoy photographing green fields and mountains, which look much calmer and more photogenic than busy city streets.

제안: Begin with a clear, natural topic sentence saying you like both options, then explain specific reasons for each using linking words (e.g., 'because' and 'however'). Correct grammar (articles, plural nouns) and keep it within 2–4 sentences.

예시: I like photographing both domestic and foreign places. For instance, I enjoy taking photos in the north of my country because of the mountains and wide green landscapes; however, when I travel abroad I also capture unique architecture and cultural scenes to broaden my portfolio.

× Absolutely, I love capturing a beautiful scenery when I whenever I travel, uh, taking care pictures makes me remember a special moments and the places and everything time I can.

✓ Absolutely, I love capturing beautiful scenery whenever I travel; taking care of pictures helps me remember special moments, places, and everything I can.

Errors: unnecessary articles and incorrect use of gerunds and verb patterns. 'a beautiful scenery' - 'scenery' is uncountable, so remove 'a'. 'when I whenever I travel' - redundant words; use 'whenever'. 'taking care pictures' is incorrect; the correct gerund phrase is 'taking care of pictures' but in context 'taking pictures' or 'taking care of pictures' is awkward; use 'taking care of' if meaning preserving, but likely 'taking pictures' fits. Also 'makes me remember' should be 'helps me remember' for natural collocation. 'a special moments' should be 'special moments' (no article and plural). Suggestions: remove redundant words, use correct gerund forms, and match countability of nouns.

× Sharing my pictures with my friends on social media, uh, photography is relaxing me, umm, relaxing uh, things for me and.

✓ Sharing my pictures with my friends on social media is relaxing for me; photography helps me relax.

Errors: sentence fragments and pronoun/reference issues. The original mixes a participial phrase with an unrelated clause 'photography is relaxing me' which is unnatural; 'relaxing me' is awkward—use 'relaxing for me' or 'helps me relax'. Also ending 'and' leaves the sentence incomplete. Suggest restructuring into two clear clauses and using correct adjective vs verb forms.

× For me, I prefer capturing in a rural area because there is a long land and and a lot of a beautiful sensory than your pan area where there is where there is more cars and pollution, especially in pollution, especially in.

✓ For me, I prefer capturing in rural areas because there are wide open spaces and much more beautiful scenery than in urban areas, where there are more cars and pollution.

Errors: prepositions and plurality. Use 'in rural areas' (plural) or 'in a rural area' consistently. 'long land' is unnatural; use 'wide open spaces' or 'large tracts of land'. 'a lot of a beautiful sensory' is incorrect: 'scenery' uncountable and misspelled; use 'much more beautiful scenery'. 'your pan area' likely meant 'urban area' and should be 'urban'. Also 'there is more cars' violates subject-verb agreement; use 'there are more cars'. Remove repeated phrases and the dangling repetition 'especially in'. Suggest correct prepositions ('in urban areas') and match singular/plural.

× It is being the owner situation. Sometimes I prefer to take the photo in my country, especially in the north of my country where there is the mountains and large landscape and green places.

✓ It depends on the situation. Sometimes I prefer to take photos in my country, especially in the north where there are mountains, large landscapes, and green areas.

Errors: incorrect verb phrase 'It is being the owner situation' which should be 'It depends on the situation'—present simple 'depends' fits. 'take the photo' should be plural 'take photos' for general preference. 'in the north of my country where there is the mountains' has article and agreement errors: use 'in the north where there are mountains'. 'large landscape' should be plural or 'large landscapes'. Suggest using 'depends' for preferences and ensure noun plurality and subject-verb agreement.

× But sometimes when I travel also I prefer to take photo for different place.

✓ But sometimes when I travel I also prefer to take photos in different places.

Errors: gerund/infinitive and countability. 'take photo' should be 'take photos' (plural) or 'take a photo'. 'for different place' is incorrect preposition and singular; use 'in different places'. Reorder 'I also' for natural word order. Suggest using plural nouns for general statements and correct prepositions.