Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Cải thiện: Trả lời cần rõ ràng, mạch lạc và ngắn gọn (không quá 5 câu). Tránh lỗi phát âm/viết (ví dụ: "veils" nên là "views"), lặp từ và cấu trúc sai. Bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề trực tiếp trả lời câu hỏi, sau đó thêm 1–2 chi tiết hỗ trợ cụ thể bằng cách dùng liên từ như "because", "for example", hoặc "so" để kết nối ý. Chú ý dùng từ vựng phù hợp (sunset, city skyline, landscape, atmosphere) và kiểm soát ngữ pháp (present simple).

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because it helps me preserve memories and capture the changing landscape. For example, I often photograph sunsets and city skylines when I travel because the colours and atmosphere feel very emotional and unique.

제안: Cải thiện: Trả lời cần trực tiếp và cụ thể; loại bỏ từ thừa và sửa ngữ pháp (động từ chia, thứ tự từ). Bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề: "I prefer..." rồi nêu lý do rõ ràng và một ví dụ ngắn. Sử dụng liên từ như "because" hoặc "so" để liên kết câu lý giải. Tránh câu mơ hồ như "make me feels I'm very make"; thay bằng cụm cố định như "make me feel relaxed and at home".

예시: I prefer views in rural areas because they make me feel relaxed and connected to nature. For example, I enjoy walking in the countryside where the quiet atmosphere and green fields help me unwind.

제안: Cải thiện: Trả lời cần ngắn gọn, tránh lặp và sửa ngữ pháp; dùng từ chính xác thay cho những từ sai (ví dụ: "spectacular", "palm bay" không phải cụm phổ dụng—có thể nói "palm-fringed beaches"). Bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề rồi cung cấp lý do cụ thể và một ví dụ ngắn. Dùng liên từ như "because" và cụm mô tả cụ thể (e.g., "palm-fringed beaches, rolling hills").

예시: I prefer views in my own country because we have many diverse and beautiful landscapes. For example, there are palm-fringed beaches and rolling countryside that look particularly spectacular when I travel around the region.

× Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different veils because it helps me capture memorable moments and beautiful and beauty of changing landscape landscape.

✓ Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because it helps me capture memorable moments and the beauty of the changing landscape.

The student used the wrong word 'veils' instead of 'views' and repeated words 'beautiful and beauty' and 'landscape landscape'. This is an incorrect use of adjectives/nouns and redundant phrasing. Suggestion: use the noun 'views' and a single appropriate phrase 'the beauty of the changing landscape' to avoid redundancy.

× For example, I often photograph sunsets or Cities Skyland when traveling as the skin reserve, a reserve, the atmospheres and emotional place.

✓ For example, I often photograph sunsets or city skylines when traveling because they preserve the atmosphere and emotions of a place.

The original sentence has jumbled word order and many incorrect or meaningless phrases ('Cities Skyland', 'as the skin reserve'). This is a sentence structure error. Suggestion: use correct noun phrase 'city skylines', connect clauses with 'because', and use clear verbs 'preserve the atmosphere and emotions'.

× Umm yes, in my private field I prefer views in rural areas because it make me feels I'm very make.

✓ Umm yes, personally I prefer views in rural areas because they make me feel calm and happy.

The sentence uses incorrect verb forms 'make me feels' and awkward phrasing 'I'm very make'. This is a present tense and subject-verb agreement issue combined with wrong word choice; choose plural subject 'they' for 'views' and base verb 'make' with 'feel' (not 'feels'). Suggestion: rephrase to 'they make me feel calm and happy'.

× It's make me feel sense of belongings and relax and and why myself?

✓ They make me feel a sense of belonging and relaxed and help me be myself.

The original mixes pronouns and forms ('It's make me', 'sense of belongings') and has duplicated words. This is an incorrect use of pronouns and noun forms. Use plural pronoun 'they' for 'views', the fixed expression 'a sense of belonging', and the adjective 'relaxed' rather than 'relax'.

× In my personal opinion, I prefer views in my own country because in my country there's there a lot of beautiful.

✓ In my personal opinion, I prefer views in my own country because there are a lot of beautiful places.

The sentence misorders 'there's there' and lacks a noun after 'beautiful'. This is incorrect use of existential construction and missing noun; use 'there are' for plural 'places' and include the noun 'places'.

× There are lots of studying landscapes like Palm Bay or carpet beach and in my and when I traveling in my countryside see a lot of spect spectacular.

✓ There are many stunning landscapes like Palm Bay or Carpet Beach, and when I travel in the countryside I see many spectacular views.

Multiple errors: 'studying landscapes' is wrong word choice, inconsistent capitalization, wrong verb form 'when I traveling', and word duplication 'spect spectacular'. This is primarily a singular/plural and word choice issue. Suggestion: use 'many' with plural 'landscapes' and correct verb 'when I travel' plus adjective 'spectacular' before 'views'.