Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Perbaiki kejelasan dan kelancaran jawaban dengan menghilangkan pengisi kata (uh), menggunakan kalimat topik yang jelas, dan menambahkan satu penjelasan spesifik. Gunakan maksimal 3–4 kalimat yang kohesif.

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of landscapes such as mountains and rivers. I often edit the best shots and share them on social media to inspire friends. For example, I recently posted a sunset river photo that got many positive comments.

제안: Buat jawaban lebih alami dengan satu kalimat topik langsung dan satu atau dua alasan spesifik menggunakan linking words (for example, because, so). Hindari pengulangan frasa yang sama.

예시: I prefer photographing urban views because cities offer interesting architecture and vibrant street scenes. For example, I like capturing colorful markets and historic buildings that show local character.

제안: Jelaskan alasan konkret mengapa memilih pemandangan luar negeri, sebutkan contoh spesifik tempat atau fitur, dan gunakan struktur kalimat yang lebih ringkas tanpa pengisi kata. Tambahkan linking phrase seperti 'for instance' atau 'because'.

예시: I usually prefer views from other countries because each place has unique landscapes and cultures. For instance, I enjoy Japan's gardens and Europe's historic cityscapes, which offer different photo opportunities than my home country.

× Definitely, I like to take a photograph like, uh, mountains, rivers or other beautiful sceneries.

✓ Definitely, I like to take photographs of mountains, rivers, or other beautiful scenery.

The student used 'a photograph' with plural objects and 'sceneries' which is uncommon. Use plural 'photographs' when referring to taking many pictures. Use the preposition 'of' to indicate what the photographs show. 'Scenery' is an uncountable noun, so do not pluralize it. Improve by matching countable/uncountable nouns: 'photographs of ... scenery'. (English explanation for Indonesian speaker).

× And then I usually share, uh, our photography to others.

✓ And then I usually share my photographs with others.

The student used 'our photography' which incorrectly uses a plural possessive; 'my photographs' is correct if speaking about personal photos. Use the verb 'share' with preposition 'with' rather than 'to'. Also 'photography' as an activity differs from 'photographs' as the pictures themselves. Suggestion: say 'I share my photographs with others.' (English explanation for Indonesian speaker).

× So, uh, they can, uh.

✓ So, uh, they can see them.

This fragment lacks a complete verb phrase and object; it's an incomplete sentence. Add the object 'them' and verb 'see' to complete the thought. Ensure sentences are finished: 'so they can see them.' (English explanation for Indonesian speaker).

× For the, uh, good scenery, I prefer to take a photograph or uh, picture in urban areas because of many beautiful scenery in urban areas.

✓ For good scenery, I prefer to take photographs or pictures in urban areas because there is a lot of beautiful scenery there.

Problems: unnecessary 'the' before 'good scenery'; inconsistent singular/plural 'a photograph or picture' while referring generally; 'many beautiful scenery' is incorrect because 'scenery' is uncountable and requires 'a lot of' or 'much' and needs 'there' to indicate location. Use plural 'photographs' for general actions and 'there is a lot of beautiful scenery' for uncountable noun. (English explanation for Indonesian speaker).

× As a whole, I prefer to choose the views from other countries, uh, not only other countries, but particularly other countries like, uh, Australia, Europe or Asian countries like Japan, Korea, because they have many beautiful.

✓ Overall, I prefer views from other countries, particularly places like Australia, countries in Europe, or Asian countries such as Japan and Korea, because they have many beautiful sights.

Problems: redundant repetition 'other countries' and awkward phrasing 'prefer to choose the views from other countries'. Use 'prefer views from other countries' or 'prefer to take photos of views in other countries.' Replace vague 'they have many beautiful' with a noun like 'beautiful sights' or 'beautiful landscapes.' Also list regions and countries consistently. This yields clearer, grammatical expression. (English explanation for Indonesian speaker).