Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Clarify and correct word choice, tighten grammar, and make the answer more natural and concise. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then give one specific supporting detail using a linking word. Replace incorrect words ('sports' → 'spots' or 'scenes', 'memorize' → 'remember/record') and fix article and plural errors.

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because there are many interesting spots near where I live. For example, I often photograph riverside walks and colorful street markets to record how they change with the seasons.

제안: Answer directly and correct vocabulary and phrasing; use a linking word to support your preference with a specific reason. Replace 'trade centrals' with 'commercial centres' or 'city centre' and 'sports' with 'spots' or 'subjects'. Keep to two or three sentences maximum.

예시: I prefer views in urban areas, especially the city centre, because there are many striking subjects to photograph. For instance, I enjoy capturing modern architecture and busy streets since they offer varied shapes and colours.

제안: Make the contrast clearer and more concise. Start with a direct statement of preference, then use a linking word (e.g. 'however'/'although') to give a specific supporting detail about your own country. Avoid redundancy like 'places and locations'.

예시: I prefer taking photos in other countries because I enjoy discovering new sights and cultures. However, my own country also offers many interesting scenes, such as historic neighbourhoods and seasonal festivals that I like to photograph.

× Yes, I do like taking pictures of different views because there are a lot of interesting sports surround me and I prefer to memorize all this locations.

✓ Yes, I do like taking pictures of different views because there are a lot of interesting spots around me and I prefer to remember all these locations.

'sports' is incorrect for 'spots' (wrong word choice and plural form confusion); 'surround me' should be 'around me' (preposition error) — primary issue: singular/plural and word choice. 'this locations' mixes singular demonstrative with plural noun; use 'these locations'. Also 'memorize' is grammatically possible but 'remember' is more natural here. Suggestion: use 'spots' for places, 'around' for location, and match demonstrative 'these' with plural nouns.

× I prefer views in urban areas such as downtown or trade centrals because I can see a lot of interesting sports to take pictures of.

✓ I prefer views in urban areas such as downtown or trade centers because I can see a lot of interesting spots to take pictures of.

'trade centrals' is incorrect: the correct phrase is 'trade centers' (word choice and pluralization). 'sports' should be 'spots' (wrong word choice). Preposition use 'to take pictures of' is acceptable at the end, but ensure noun forms are correct. Suggestion: use 'trade centers' and 'spots'.

× For sure, I would like to take photos of locations in different countries, but sometimes I can encounter many interesting places and locations in my own country and even in my own city.

✓ For sure, I would like to take photos of locations in different countries, but sometimes I encounter many interesting places and locations in my own country and even in my own city.

'can encounter' is grammatically possible but changes meaning; in this context simple present 'encounter' is better to express habitual possibility. Primary flagged issue: unnecessary modal 'can' vs present tense — relates to tense/modal but also natural usage. Also 'places and locations' is redundant; consider using just 'places' or 'locations'. Suggestion: use 'encounter' for natural habitual statement and avoid redundant words.