Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make your response more focused and natural by using one clear topic sentence, varied vocabulary, and linking words. Avoid repetition (e.g., “I really like it” and repeating “families”) and keep to 3–4 concise sentences. Add a specific example or brief reason to enrich the answer.

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different landscapes. For example, I often photograph mountains and seaside scenes when I go cycling with my family because the light and colours are beautiful. I usually take photos of candid moments to remember our trips.

제안: Start with a direct topic sentence and use linking words to list reasons clearly. Use accurate grammar (e.g., 'non-polluted', 'enjoyable places') and add one specific example to support your preference.

예시: I prefer views in rural areas because they are less polluted and have wide green fields and clearer skies. For instance, I enjoy visiting a nearby village where I can walk among rice paddies and watch the sunset without city noise.

제안: Avoid repeating 'familiar' and 'country'. Begin with a clear statement (no 'Yes' alone), give 1–2 concise reasons with linking words, and include a specific example to illustrate your point. Correct small grammar issues (e.g., 'a huge number of things' or 'many opportunities').

예시: I usually prefer views in my own country because I know the best seasons and locations for photography. For example, living in India lets me plan visits to the Himalayan foothills in winter and coastal areas in autumn, so I can capture different kinds of scenery.

× Yes, I do like taking pictures in different views like mountains, bike riding with my family on sea shores and some other locations.

✓ Yes, I do like taking pictures of different scenes, such as mountains, riding bikes with my family on seashores, and other locations.

The sentence misuses noun forms and prepositions and has awkward gerund phrases. Replace 'in different views' with 'of different scenes' and use 'such as' for examples. Use 'riding bikes' rather than 'bike riding' to make the gerund phrase parallel with other noun phrases; use 'seashores' (one word) and 'on' is correct. This keeps verb forms consistent and improves clarity. ID:10

× I generally take photos with my families.

✓ I generally take photos with my family.

'Families' is plural and implies multiple separate families; the speaker likely means their own family (singular). Use the quantifier/ noun 'family' to indicate the group. This fixes number agreement and meaning. ID:14

× I prefer views in rural areas as they are non polluted areas, green fields, clear skies and such an enjoyable places there.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because they are less polluted, with green fields, clear skies, and generally enjoyable places.

The original mixes plural and singular forms and has awkward structure. Use 'because' for reason, 'less polluted' is a natural comparative, and rephrase list with parallel structure: 'with green fields, clear skies, and generally enjoyable places.' Remove redundant 'there' at end. This corrects sentence structure and agreement. ID:26

× I prefer views in my own country because they are familiar.

✓ I prefer the views in my own country because they are familiar to me.

Use 'the views' to refer to previously mentioned views and add 'to me' to clarify what 'familiar' modifies. This fixes article and preposition usage and clarifies meaning. ID:11

× I am familiar with the nature of the country and the weather conditions of the country and as I live in India, there is huge amount of the things to do in India and take pictures and views.

✓ I am familiar with the country's nature and weather conditions, and since I live in India, there are a huge number of things to do and places to photograph.

The original repeats 'of the country' and misuses 'there is' with a plural idea and 'amount' for countable 'things'. Replace with possessive 'country's', use 'since' for causal link, 'there are' for plural, and 'a huge number of' for countable nouns. Change 'take pictures and views' to 'places to photograph' for natural phrasing. This corrects pronoun repetition, subject-verb agreement, and quantifier choice. ID:12