Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 文法と表現の自然さを改善してください。主語と動詞の一致（"I am fond of"）や語順（"pictures of different views"）を直し、冗長な表現（"during the travel, during the trip"）を一つにまとめます。また、回答構成を明確にするために主題文の後で具体例を一つ加えてください。接続詞（"for example", "also"）を使って情報を論理的に繋げると良いです。

예시: I'm fond of taking pictures of different views. I especially enjoy photographing landscapes when I travel, so I always take lots of photos on trips; for example, last year I captured sunsets and cityscapes during a trip to Kyoto.

제안: 良い答えですが、話をもう少し具体的かつ簡潔にまとめ、文法の微修正を行ってください。年数の表現は"for 22 years"か"I'm 22 years old"のどちらかに統一し、同じ意味の繰り返し（"view" と "night view"）を整理します。接続語（"because", "for example"）で理由や具体例をつなぐと説得力が増します。

예시: I prefer urban views because I find cityscapes more exciting. For example, having lived in Tokyo for 22 years, I love the night skyline with its tall buildings and bright lights, which I find truly gorgeous.

제안: 主張を明確にし、比較の根拠を具体的に述べてください。現在の答えは断定が強く（"much larger than any other cities"）事実と異なる可能性があるため、控えめな表現（"I prefer", "seems"）を使い、具体例（建物の多さ、文化の多様性、夜景など）で支持すると信頼性が上がります。

예시: I generally prefer views in my own country. For instance, Tokyo feels more vibrant to me because of its dense skyline, diverse neighborhoods and spectacular night views, so I often find local scenes more appealing than those abroad.

× I fond of taking different views, picture especially.

✓ I am fond of taking pictures of different views, especially.

'fond' is an adjective that needs a linking verb; add 'am' for correct sentence structure. 'picture' is used incorrectly; the correct plural noun is 'pictures'. Word order: 'especially' normally follows the phrase it modifies. Suggestion: use 'I am fond of taking pictures of different views, especially' or 'I am especially fond of taking pictures of different views.'

× I like traveling so I always take a lot of photos during the travel, during the trip and I also like taking photos with people.

✓ I like traveling, so I always take a lot of photos during trips, and I also like taking photos with people.

Using 'during the travel' is unnatural; use the plural 'trips' or 'the trip' depending on context. 'During the trip' is repetitive; combine ideas with commas and conjunctions. Also add a comma before 'so'. Suggestion: say 'during trips' for habitual action and avoid repeating similar phrases.

× I've been living in Tokyo for my entire life, 22 years, and I really like the view, especially the night view in Tokyo.

✓ I've lived in Tokyo my entire life, for 22 years, and I really like the views, especially Tokyo's night views.

Use 'I've lived' or 'I have been living' both are possible; 'I've lived my entire life, for 22 years' is more natural. 'the view' is vague; plural 'views' fits general preference. Use possessive 'Tokyo's night views' for natural phrasing. Suggestion: maintain present perfect for life experience and use plural nouns when speaking generally.

× It's really gorgeous and there are a lot of tall buildings.

✓ It's really gorgeous, and there are many tall buildings.

'a lot of' is informal; 'many' is more appropriate in neutral speech. Add a comma before 'and'. Suggestion: use 'many' for countable plural nouns in formal or neutral contexts.

× I pretty much like my country's view.

✓ I quite like my country's views.

'pretty much like' is colloquial and awkward here; 'quite like' or 'I like' is more natural. Also 'view' should be plural 'views' when speaking generally. Suggestion: use 'I quite like my country's views' or 'I rather like the views in my country.'

× I think Tokyo is widely known as a metropolitan city, so I think it's much larger than any other cities in the world.

✓ I think Tokyo is widely known as a metropolitan city, but I don't think it's larger than other cities in the world.

Logical error: claiming Tokyo is 'much larger than any other cities' is unlikely and ungrammatical with 'any other cities' (singular/plural mismatch). If comparing, use 'larger than other cities' or 'larger than many other cities'. Also sentence meaning probably intended contrast, so 'but I don't think' clarifies. Suggestion: use clear comparative structures: 'larger than other cities' or 'larger than many other cities'.