Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g., "Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views."), avoid redundant words ("a pictures", "go out outside"), and correct grammar (use gerunds and articles correctly). Add one specific supporting detail using a linking word (e.g., "for example" or "because") to explain why you like it. Keep to 2–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views. For example, when I walk in the park I often photograph interesting buildings and sunsets because they help me remember special moments. I also share my best shots with friends online.

제안: Give a direct answer first (urban or rural or both) and then support it with a clear reason and a specific example. Remove hesitations and repeated words. Use linking words like "because" or "however" to connect your ideas. Keep the response within 2–4 sentences and use accurate grammar (e.g., "I prefer" not "I love to take in").

예시: I prefer both urban and rural views because each offers something different. For instance, cities have dramatic architecture and lively streets, while the countryside offers peaceful landscapes and natural light, so I photograph both depending on my mood.

제안: Answer directly and confidently, avoid fillers ("uh", "it's") and repetition. State a clear reason and give a concrete example or contrast using linking words like "because" and "for example." Use correct tense and plural forms ("different views" not "new, new and different views"). Limit to 2–4 sentences.

예시: I prefer views in other countries because they feel fresher and more varied. For example, when I visited Japan I photographed unique street scenes and architecture unlike anything back home, so I enjoy capturing those new impressions.

× Yes, I love to take a pictures of different views on my daily routine.

✓ Yes, I love to take pictures of different views in my daily routine.

The error is using the article 'a' with the plural noun 'pictures'. Remove 'a' because plural nouns do not take 'a'. Also use the preposition 'in' with 'my daily routine' rather than 'on'. Suggestion: say 'take pictures' and 'in my daily routine'. ID:22

× Whenever I go out outside, I love to do snapping and connected with my friends.

✓ Whenever I go outside, I love snapping photos and connecting with my friends.

Redundant phrase 'go out outside' — use 'go outside'. 'Do snapping' is incorrect; use the gerund 'snapping' or phrase 'take snapshots'. 'Connected' should be the present participle 'connecting' to match 'love' + verb-ing. Suggestion: use 'love snapping' and 'connecting with my friends'. ID:8

× It also helps me to remember that memories of wherever I see my life.

✓ It also helps me remember the memories of places I have been in my life.

The original is ungrammatical and unclear. 'Helps me to remember that memories of wherever I see my life' mixes clauses incorrectly. Use 'helps me remember' (omit 'to' optional), 'the memories of places I have been' to convey meaning. Use present perfect 'have been' for life experiences. Suggestion: simplify to 'helps me remember the memories of places I have been'. ID:26

× Actually it, it depends on, uh, where I'm going or where I went.

✓ Actually, it depends on where I'm going or where I went.

Unnecessary filler 'it, it' and extra comma placement create issues. Pronoun use is okay but repetition and pauses should be removed. Suggestion: say 'Actually, it depends on where I'm going or where I went.' ID:12

× So where, where am I go on either on rural areas or urban areas.

✓ So it depends on whether I go to rural areas or urban areas.

Word order and structure are incorrect: 'where am I go' is wrong; use 'whether I go to'. Preposition 'to' is required with 'go'. Also use singular 'rural areas or urban areas' is acceptable but better as 'rural or urban areas'. Suggestion: 'whether I go to rural or urban areas.' ID:26

× I love to take in photos of different kinds of objects and places and the mostly important views of.

✓ I love taking photos of different kinds of objects and places, especially the most important views.

Use gerund 'taking photos' rather than 'to take in photos'. Ending phrase 'the mostly important views of' is ungrammatical; use 'especially the most important views'. 'Mostly' should be 'most' as an adjective. Suggestion: 'I love taking photos... especially the most important views.' ID:8

× I prefer views in other countries because, uh, it's, uh, every time it's a new, new and different views for me in my country.

✓ I prefer views in other countries because every time it's a new and different view for me compared to my country.

Plural/singular mismatch: 'a new, new and different views' mixes singular article with plural noun. Use 'a new and different view' or 'new and different views'. Also 'for me in my country' is unclear; better 'compared to my country'. Remove filler 'uh' and duplicate 'new'. Suggestion: 'it's a new and different view for me compared to my country.' ID:11

× Uh, all the views that I have seen in my life, those are like already taking pictures and capturing my mind.

✓ All the views that I have seen in my life have already been photographed and captured in my mind.

'Those are like already taking pictures' incorrectly uses plural subject with active verb; passive 'have been photographed' is appropriate. 'Capturing my mind' should be 'captured in my mind'. Suggestion: use present perfect passive to show past actions with present relevance: 'have already been photographed and captured in my mind.' ID:1

× But whenever I go outside other countries, the different views, different pictures I collect in my phone.

✓ But whenever I go to other countries, I collect different views and pictures on my phone.

Missing preposition 'to' after 'go' and incorrect word order 'the different views, different pictures I collect' is awkward. Use subject-verb 'I collect' and place objects after. 'On my phone' is better than 'in my phone'. Suggestion: 'I collect different views and pictures on my phone.' ID:26