Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Améliorez la précision grammaticale et la fluidité. Évitez les hésitations (« uh », « umm ») et corrigez les erreurs d'accord et de nombre. Utilisez une structure claire: une phrase principale répondant directement, suivie d'un détail spécifique et d'un exemple succinct. Raccourcissez à 2–3 phrases et variez le vocabulaire (par ex. “capturing”, “keepsakes”, “share with relatives”).

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views because they create lasting memories. For example, when I return home I often create albums to share with my family.

제안: Travaillez la précision grammaticale et l'accord singulier/pluriel (« architecture » non comptable, « buildings » pluriel) et éliminez les pauses inutiles. Donnez un motif concret et un exemple visuel, en utilisant des connecteurs comme « because » et « for example ». Utilisez un vocabulaire varié lié à la photographie (e.g. composition, contrast, textures).

예시: I prefer urban views because dramatic architecture and contrasting light create interesting compositions; for example, tall buildings cast strong shadows that add depth to my photos.

제안: Rendez la réponse plus fluide et grammaticale: évitez les hésitations et utilisez des phrases complètes pour énumérer les types de paysages. Ajoutez une raison précise et un petit exemple personnel. Utilisez des mots de liaison comme « because » et « for instance ».

예시: I prefer views in my own country because it offers a wide variety of landscapes; for instance, I can easily visit mountains, the coast and rural countryside within a few hours' drive.

× Yeah, I'm a bit fond of taking picture.

✓ Yeah, I'm a bit fond of taking pictures.

The noun 'picture' should be plural 'pictures' because 'taking' with no article implies a general activity involving multiple items; English requires plural for countable nouns in this context. Suggestion: use the plural with verbs of habitual activity (taking pictures) or add an article if singular (taking a picture).

× I believe it's great memories.

✓ I believe they are great memories.

The original uses 'it' with a plural noun 'memories', causing a mismatch. Replace 'it' with the plural pronoun 'they' and use 'are' to match number. Suggestion: ensure pronouns agree in number with nouns they refer to.

× When we come back home, uh, we can go back to it and share it with our family.

✓ When we come back home, uh, we can look back at them and share them with our family.

Pronouns 'it' refer to plural 'pictures' so should be 'them'. Also 'go back to it' is awkward for reviewing photos; 'look back at' or 'look through' is clearer. Suggestion: match pronoun number and choose appropriate verb phrase for the action.

× I prefer cities because of striking architectures, uh, and building that create, umm, shadows that can be used for pictures.

✓ I prefer cities because of striking architecture and buildings that create shadows which can be used for photos.

'Architectures' is incorrect in English; 'architecture' is an uncountable noun. 'Building' should be plural 'buildings' to refer generally. Also 'that create, umm, shadows that can be used for pictures' is wordy; use 'shadows which can be used for photos'. Suggestion: use uncountable 'architecture' and pluralize countable nouns; simplify redundant clauses.

× I'd say I prefer the view in my own country since there are varieties of them.

✓ I'd say I prefer the views in my own country since there are various kinds of them.

'The view' suggests singular but speaker refers to multiple views; change to plural 'views'. 'Varieties of them' is awkward; use 'various kinds of views' or 'many varieties'. Suggestion: ensure noun number matches intended meaning and use clearer collocations ('various kinds of').

× Umm, mountain, the sea, the countryside.

✓ For example: mountains, the sea, and the countryside.

This list mixes singular and general categories; to list examples of landscapes, pluralize 'mountains' or use 'a mountain' with an article consistently. Also include conjunctions for clarity. Suggestion: present lists with parallel structure and appropriate articles or plurals.