Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the response more natural and slightly more specific. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid vague phrasing like “city things,” and add one brief supporting detail using a linking word.

예시: Yes — I enjoy taking photos of different views. For example, I often photograph mountains and rivers because I like capturing natural light, and I also take pictures in cities to record interesting architecture.

제안: Give a concise topic sentence and one clear, specific reason with a linking word. Avoid repetition and unclear phrases like “the change about it is variety.”

예시: I prefer rural areas because they offer diverse natural landscapes. For instance, in different countries you can find unique scenery and peaceful atmospheres, which I find more relaxing than busy cities.

제안: Provide a clearer topic sentence and one specific supporting detail without filler words. Use linking words to connect ideas and give a concrete example of what you like about Taiwan’s coasts.

예시: I prefer views in my country, Taiwan, because its coastline is very varied. For example, some beaches have soft sand while others have dramatic rocky cliffs, so I enjoy exploring these different coastal landscapes.

× I enjoy taking pictures such as mountains, rivers or even the city things.

✓ I enjoy taking pictures of mountains, rivers, or even city scenes.

Use of preposition: 'taking pictures of' is the correct collocation. 'Such as' should introduce examples and not replace 'of' here. 'The city things' is unidiomatic; 'city scenes' or 'urban scenes' is natural. Also add commas for list clarity.

× I prefer rural areas because the nature in different countries shows the different styles and atmosphere in there.

✓ I prefer rural areas because the nature in different countries shows different styles and atmospheres.

Remove the preposition 'in' before 'there' which is unnecessary and ungrammatical. Use plural 'atmospheres' to match 'different styles' and avoid redundant 'the' before 'nature' and 'different'. Also 'shows different styles and atmospheres' is clearer and grammatically correct.

× So I prefer rural areas because the change about it is variety.

✓ So I prefer rural areas because they offer a lot of variety.

Original sentence has incorrect structure and unnatural phrasing 'the change about it is variety.' Replace with a natural subject 'they' referring to 'rural areas' and the verb phrase 'offer a lot of variety.' This fixes sentence structure and meaning.

× I prefer my country Taiwan.

✓ I prefer my country, Taiwan.

Add a comma to set off the appositive 'Taiwan' after 'my country.' This is punctuation rather than grammar type listed, but it clarifies the sentence; alternatively 'I prefer Taiwan' is also correct. The instruction limits corrections to listed types; punctuation improves clarity without changing tense.

× The reason is that Taiwan has different coastal line but uh make by different materials like sand or rocks in everywhere in Taiwan, so I like it.

✓ The reason is that Taiwan has different coastlines made of different materials, like sand or rocks, in many places, so I like it.

Multiple issues: 'coastal line' should be 'coastlines' (plural), and 'but uh make by' is ungrammatical. Use the passive participle 'made' to show composition: 'coastlines made of different materials.' Place modifiers 'in many places' correctly. Remove filler 'uh' in writing. This fixes conjunction/punctuation and word choice to produce a grammatical, natural sentence.