Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is unclear and off-topic. Start with a direct, relevant topic sentence (yes/no and a brief reason), avoid mentioning unrelated things (e.g. a film named 'Refills' unless relevant), and expand with one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Keep it natural and concise (max 5 sentences).

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because I love capturing changing light and colours. For example, I often photograph sunsets and city skylines when the light is dramatic, which helps me practice composition. Also, I keep some photos to remember places I visit.

제안: The answer is confusing and contains irrelevant phrases. Give a clear preference with a reason and one specific detail. Use linking words like 'because' or 'because of' and avoid unclear vocabulary. Keep sentences grammatical and coherent.

예시: I prefer views in urban areas because I like the variety of architecture and busy streets. For instance, I enjoy photographing modern buildings, colourful markets, and street scenes, which offer many interesting details and contrasts.

제안: Your answer is repetitive and vague. State a clear preference and explain why with specific examples. Use linking words (however, but, although) to compare both options and keep the response concise and coherent.

예시: I generally prefer photographing views in other countries because they offer new landscapes and cultural scenes. However, I also take photos at home occasionally, such as street scenes or the skyline, when I notice interesting light or unusual colours.

× Yes, because I think the film Refills is so loving. Also pictures.

✓ Yes, because I think the film Refills is very touching. I also like taking pictures.

The word 'loving' is an adjective describing people showing love; to describe a film that evokes emotion use 'touching' or 'moving'. 'Also pictures.' is a sentence fragment and unclear; it should be expanded to show the intended meaning, e.g. 'I also like taking pictures.' Use 'very' instead of 'so' for neutral formal correction. Grammar problem type ID:13

× Urban areas because it's not so many races here a rose.

✓ Urban areas, because there are not so many races here.

The original sentence mixes singular and plural and has incorrect structure. 'It's' (it is) cannot be followed by 'not so many races'; use 'there are' to indicate existence of plural 'races'. The phrase 'a rose' is extraneous and unclear, so it is removed. Also punctuation and word order improved. Grammar problem type ID:1

× In another country, but my own country I will picture in it.

✓ I prefer taking pictures in other countries, but I still take photos in my own country.

Original sentence is fragmented and ungrammatical. Use a clear subject and verb phrase: 'I prefer taking pictures in other countries' expresses preference; follow with contrasting clause 'but I still take photos in my own country.' Avoid ending a clause with redundant pronouns like 'in it.' Grammar problem type ID:26

× So something sky, car and nothing.

✓ In my country I usually photograph simple subjects like the sky or cars.

The fragment 'So something sky, car and nothing' lacks grammatical structure and list markers. It needs a clear subject and verb and proper noun forms: 'the sky' and plural 'cars' (or 'cars'). Clarify meaning by indicating examples: 'simple subjects like the sky or cars.' Grammar problem type ID:26

× So it's so little bit at time I will picture in my own country.

✓ So only occasionally I take pictures in my own country.

The phrase 'so it's so little bit at time' is ungrammatical and awkward. Use adverb 'occasionally' or 'only a little' to express infrequency, and place it properly in the sentence: 'I only occasionally take pictures in my own country.' Ensure verb tense matches present habitual action. This correction addresses adverb placement and tense clarity. Grammar problem type ID:20}]}ingham