Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and grammatically complete. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid run-on sentences and fill gaps (e.g., explain why you like photographing family).

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. In particular, I like natural landscapes such as mountains, rivers and the sea because their colors and light make me feel relaxed. Also, when I travel I often photograph my family and friends to capture memories and expressions, so I can look back on those moments later.

제안: Correct basic grammar and avoid unfinished sentences. Begin with a direct statement of preference, then give two specific reasons with linking words. Use precise vocabulary (e.g., 'urban areas', 'architecture', 'street life').

예시: I prefer views in urban areas. I find tall buildings and varied architecture visually interesting, and the busy street life adds energy and variety to my photos. For example, I enjoy photographing façades, cafés and people walking because they tell a story about city life.

제안: Avoid vague phrases and incomplete thoughts. State your preference clearly, give specific reasons, and include a concrete example. Replace filler words ('you know') and finish your examples (e.g., what Italy has).

예시: I prefer views in other countries. I enjoy discovering different landscapes, architecture and cultures, which feel fresher than the familiar scenes at home. For example, in Italy I love photographing historic piazzas and old churches because their textures and colors are unlike what I see locally.

× Yes, I do I enjoy photographing different views very much, especially the natural landscapes such as the mountains or rivers or the sea these sceneries make me relaxing and also like taking shots of my family and friends when we travel because.

✓ Yes, I do. I enjoy photographing different views very much, especially natural landscapes such as mountains, rivers, and the sea. These sceneries make me feel relaxed, and I also like taking shots of my family and friends when we travel.

The original contains run-on sentences and missing punctuation, causing sentence structure errors (ID 26). It also has incorrect adjective/adverb use ('make me relaxing' should be 'make me feel relaxed') and missing conjunctions and articles. Suggestion: split into shorter sentences, add necessary punctuation, use 'feel relaxed' (adjective) instead of 'relaxing' in this structure, and include commas between list items.

× I think I prefer used in urban areas. I just find myself interested in looking at the tall buildings and the busy pedestrians and the streets and the architecture. So those are more fascinating than.

✓ I think I prefer views in urban areas. I just find myself interested in looking at tall buildings, busy pedestrians, streets, and architecture. Those are more fascinating to me.

The phrase 'prefer used in urban areas' is incorrect; 'prefer views in' uses the correct preposition (ID 11). Also the original ends incomplete ('more fascinating than') — sentence structure error (ID 26). Suggestions: use 'prefer views in urban areas', remove unnecessary articles before plural nouns ('tall buildings' not 'the tall buildings' unless specific), add commas in lists, and finish comparisons with an object or phrase ('to me').

× I think other countries, maybe I just already got tired of working the same views in my country. I prefer to go out and you know, experience in the views of other countries such as Italy, they have the.

✓ I think other countries. Maybe I'm just already tired of seeing the same views in my country. I prefer to go out and experience the views of other countries, such as those in Italy.

The original mixes tenses and uses incorrect verb forms: 'got tired' is past tense while context calls for present perfect or present (ID 6); 'working the same views' is incorrect verb choice and preposition use (ID 11). 'Experience in the views' is incorrect; use 'experience the views' (no preposition). Also the sentence is a run-on and ends abruptly. Suggestions: use 'I'm already tired of seeing' or 'I've grown tired of seeing' for present relevance, use correct verb 'see' for views, remove unnecessary 'in', and complete the sentence.