Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 문장은 자연스럽고 의미 전달이 잘 되지만 반복과 문법 오류가 있습니다. 같은 표현("taking different views/taking photos of different view")을 반복하지 말고, 주어-동사 일치와 시제, 관사 사용을 교정하세요. 또한 응답을 보다 간결하게 만들기 위해 토픽 문장 후 한두 개의 구체적 이유나 예시로 연결하는 연습을 하세요. 예를 들어 'I enjoy photographing landscapes because...; For example,...'처럼 연결어(for example, because, which)로 문장을 매끄럽게 이어보세요.

예시: I really enjoy photographing different views because I love traveling and exploring new places. For example, I often take photos of skies and wide landscapes, which inspire me and help me remember the places I visit.

제안: 의견은 명확하지만 어휘 선택과 문법(단수/복수, 어순)에서 오류가 있습니다. 'it is' 대신 복수 명사에 맞는 표현 사용, 'seem to more seem to' 같은 중복 제거가 필요합니다. 구체적인 묘사(예: sounds, smells, activities)를 추가하면 답변이 풍부해집니다. 연결어(therefore, because, for instance)를 사용해 이유와 예시를 자연스럽게 연결하세요.

예시: I prefer views in rural areas because they feel more natural and peaceful. For instance, mountains, sunsets and the sea offer wide, open views and fresh air, which help me relax and feel free.

제안: 전달하고자 하는 의미는 명확하지만 문법(단수/복수, 동사 형태)과 연결 구문에서 개선이 필요합니다. 'in other country'는 'in other countries'로 고치고, 'gives me an inspiration'은 'inspire me'로 자연스럽게 바꾸세요. 또한 'Although... but' 같이 중복된 연결어를 피하고, 구체적인 예시(문화적 요소, 색감 등)를 하나 들어 보세요.

예시: I prefer views in other countries because new places often inspire me. For example, foreign landscapes can show different colors, architectural styles and local customs, which I find exciting and refreshing.

× I really enjoy taking different views, taking photos of different view because I like traveling and exploring new places.

✓ I really enjoy taking photos of different views because I like traveling and exploring new places.

Student uses redundant and incorrect noun phrases with taking. Use 'taking photos' not 'taking different views', and plural 'views'. Also remove repetition. Suggestion: say 'I enjoy taking photos of different views' or 'I enjoy photographing different views.'

× Taking photographs such as sky or landscape always inspired me.

✓ Taking photographs of the sky or landscapes always inspires me.

Incorrect preposition and noun form and tense agreement. Use 'of' with 'photographs of the sky', plural 'landscapes' to match general meaning, and present simple 'inspires' to match 'I' subject (or rephrase to 'have always inspired me'). Suggestion: 'Photographs of the sky or landscapes always inspire me.'

× I prefer views in rural areas because it is more natural and peaceful.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because they are more natural and peaceful.

Subject 'views' is plural, so pronoun and verb must be plural: use 'they are' not 'it is'. Suggestion: Ensure pronouns match the number of the noun (singular/plural agreement).

× Uh rural landscapes such as mountain, sunset or sea are dynamic and seem to more seem to have no limits.

✓ Uh, rural landscapes such as mountains, sunsets, or the sea are dynamic and seem to have no limits.

Countable nouns 'mountain' and 'sunset' should be plural when speaking generally. Remove duplicate 'seem to' and add article 'the' before 'sea' for naturalness. Suggestion: Use plurals for general categories and avoid repetition: 'mountains, sunsets, or the sea seem to have no limits.'

× I prefer views in other country because new places always gives me an inspiration.

✓ I prefer views in other countries because new places always give me inspiration.

Use plural 'countries' after 'other', and 'places' (plural) requires plural verb 'give' not 'gives'. Also 'inspiration' typically used without 'an' in this context. Suggestion: Match subject-verb number and use plural form for general statements.

× Although I like my hometown's view but foreign landscapes offer some new cultures, color or landscape that I find exciting.

✓ Although I like my hometown's views, foreign landscapes offer new cultures, colors, or landscapes that I find exciting.

Do not use both 'Although' and 'but' together; choose one. Use plural 'views' and plural nouns 'colors' and 'landscapes' for general meaning. Also add a comma after the introductory clause. Suggestion: Use 'Although I like...' or 'I like my hometown's views, but...'; keep nouns consistent in number.