Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition (e.g., "place/places", "every to every"). Also correct verb forms and articles (e.g., "I definitely like taking pictures of many views and places").

예시: I definitely enjoy taking pictures of different views. For example, when I travel I like to capture special moments and unique locations, such as street scenes or mountain vistas, so I can look back at those memories later.

제안: Make one clear statement then support it with two concise, specific reasons linked logically. Fix grammar (e.g., "amazing landscapes that energize me") and remove repetitions. Use linking phrases like "because" or "for example" correctly.

예시: I prefer views in rural areas because the natural landscapes relax me and make me feel refreshed. For example, village fields and hills give me a peaceful atmosphere and cleaner air, which I find much more enjoyable than busy city scenes.

제안: Give a direct answer, then provide specific supporting details without trailing off. Correct grammar (e.g., "where I was born", "various places such as landscapes, beaches, and Roman historical sites"). Avoid filler phrases like "to be honest" unless followed by substance.

예시: I prefer views in my own country because it is where I grew up and I know it well. For example, my country offers diverse scenery — from mountains and beaches to Roman-era ruins — so I can appreciate both natural beauty and local history.

× I do definitely like taking pictures to many views and place and places.

✓ I definitely like taking pictures of many views and places.

The preposition 'to' is incorrect with 'taking pictures'; use 'of'. 'do' is unnecessary for emphasis; use 'definitely' before main verb. Also 'place and places' is redundant; use 'places'. Use present participle 'taking' correctly with 'like'. Suggestion: say 'I definitely like taking pictures of many views and places.'

× Especially when I travel I do like to capture an image, snapping photos on every to every special moment and especially to special places that I visit.

✓ Especially when I travel, I like to capture images, snapping photos of every special moment and special place I visit.

Overuse of auxiliary 'do' for preference is unnecessary; 'like' is sufficient. 'Capture an image' is singular and awkward; use plural 'images'. Preposition 'on' and repetition 'to every' are incorrect; use 'of every'. Remove redundant 'especially'. Ensure parallel structure: 'every special moment and special place'. Suggestion: 'Especially when I travel, I like to capture images, snapping photos of every special moment and place I visit.'

× It's makes me like look at the images that I captured.

✓ It makes me want to look at the images that I captured.

Using 'It's makes' is incorrect because 'it' with 'is' plus verb causes agreement issue. Use 'It makes' (subject 'it' + singular verb 'makes'). Also 'like look' is ungrammatical; use 'want to look' to express desire. 'Captured' (past participle) is acceptable for past action. Suggestion: 'It makes me want to look at the images that I captured.'

× Honestly, I do really prefer views in rural areas, especially in villages where there is amazing landscapes that energize the energize me and give me this vibrant sense because when looking at nature you really like, it's relaxing for the eyes.

✓ Honestly, I really prefer views in rural areas, especially in villages where there are amazing landscapes that energize me and give me a vibrant feeling, because when you look at nature, it is relaxing for the eyes.

Pronoun and agreement issues: 'there is amazing landscapes' should be 'there are amazing landscapes' to match plural noun. Remove duplicate phrase 'energize the energize me'. 'Give me this vibrant sense' is awkward; use 'give me a vibrant feeling'. 'When looking at nature you really like' is unclear and wrongly structured; use 'when you look at nature' and remove extraneous 'really like'. Use 'it is' instead of contraction for clarity. Suggestion: 'Honestly, I really prefer views in rural areas... there are amazing landscapes that energize me and give me a vibrant feeling.'

× I do really prefer views in my country because my nation, the way the place that I born in is very special.

✓ I really prefer views in my country because my nation, the place where I was born, is very special.

Use 'was born' (past passive) rather than 'born in' to form clause 'the place where I was born'. 'Do really prefer' is wordy; use 'really prefer'. 'The way the place that I born in' is ungrammatical; restructure to 'the place where I was born'. Suggestion: 'I really prefer views in my country because the place where I was born is very special.'

× It has such various places from landscapes to beaches to historical signs from the Romans Empire and to be honest, for example.

✓ It has a variety of places, from landscapes and beaches to historical sites from the Roman Empire, for example.

'Such various places' is incorrect; use 'a variety of places' or 'various places'. 'Historical signs' is wrong collocation; use 'historical sites'. 'Romans Empire' should be 'Roman Empire' (adjective form). Remove redundant filler 'to be honest' and stray 'for example' placement; combine as 'for example' at end. Suggestion: 'It has a variety of places, from landscapes and beaches to historical sites from the Roman Empire, for example.'