Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be direct and use relevant vocabulary. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words (uh, of course twice), correct wrong word choices ("interesting news" → "interesting scenes/views"), and add one specific detail about what you enjoy photographing. Keep it to 2–4 sentences and use a linking phrase if needed.

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. I especially like photographing cityscapes and natural landscapes because I enjoy capturing light and atmosphere. For example, I often go out at sunrise to photograph the soft morning light with my DSLR camera.

제안: Begin with a clear statement of preference, then give specific reasons using linking words (because, so, for example). Avoid vague phrases like "most of all" and single-word fragments. Keep responses concise and coherent.

예시: I prefer rural views because the countryside offers more peaceful, dramatic scenery and clearer natural light. For example, rolling hills and open fields let me compose wide, uncluttered shots that show colour and depth.

제안: Give a direct answer first (own country or other countries), avoid irrelevant comments ("to be honest, of course I laugh"), and use clearer grammar. Provide a reason and a short example. Use linking words (however, although, but) to compare preferences.

예시: I prefer views in my own country because Russia has incredibly diverse landscapes, from forests to mountains. However, I also enjoy photographing abroad for different architectural styles; for instance, I loved taking pictures of historic streets when I visited Europe.

× 'Areas I prefer views of rural areas because most of all you can see incredible brilliance and breathtaking views of your countryside.'

✓ 'I prefer views of rural areas because above all you can see incredible beauty and breathtaking countryside.'

'Singular and plural issue: "incredible brilliance" is an odd collocation and "views of your countryside" repeats plural unnecessarily. Change to singular noun "beauty" and concise phrase "breathtaking countryside". Also replace "most of all" with the more natural "above all". This improves noun choice and avoids awkward plural repetition.'

× 'To be honest, of course I laugh. Like abroad views, yes, but my home country is Russia and that I want to for extremely beautiful views here.'

✓ 'To be honest, of course I prefer views abroad, but my home country is Russia and I want to see the extremely beautiful views here.'

'Present tense issue: The original contains inappropriate verb forms and sequences that do not fit the present-tense preference context ("I laugh," "Like abroad views," "that I want to for"). Corrected to present simple verbs: "I prefer," "I want to see" to express general preferences. Also fix word order and collocations ("views abroad" and "extremely beautiful views").'