Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words (like, click), and add one specific reason or example using a linking word for coherence. Keep it under five sentences.

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. I usually photograph landscapes or interesting street scenes and post the best shots on my Instagram because photography helps me capture memories and share them with friends.

제안: Answer directly (state urban or rural) and avoid repetition. Use linking words like 'because' and add a specific detail or contrast. Correct grammar (use 'the countryside', 'these views').

예시: I prefer rural views in the countryside because they are calm and close to nature. For example, I enjoy photographing fields and rivers where I can relax and focus on composition without the noise of the city.

제안: Give a direct preference (either own country or abroad) then support it with clear reasons. Avoid sentence fragments and repetition. Use linking words (however, for example, because) and correct nouns/plurals ('my country', 'places').

예시: I prefer visiting views in other countries because traveling lets me discover different cultures and architectures. For example, I recently explored historic streets abroad and learned about local traditions, which reduced my stress and broadened my perspective.

× Yes I do. Whenever I go outside I like to click some pictures and like to post on my Instagram.

✓ Yes, I do. Whenever I go outside, I like to take some pictures and post them on my Instagram.

The verbs 'click' and 'post' are informal here; 'take' is the correct collocation with 'pictures'. Also 'post on my Instagram' should include the object 'them' for clarity. Add commas for natural pauses. Use consistent verb forms ('like to take' and 'post').

× Yes, in countryside there are a lot of places which is very calm and which is very close to the nature and I definitely like this views because I love the quiet, quiet places.

✓ Yes, in the countryside there are a lot of places that are very calm and very close to nature, and I definitely like these views because I love quiet places.

Missing definite article 'the' before 'countryside'. Use plural agreement: 'places that are' not 'places which is'. Use 'these views' (plural) instead of 'this views'. 'Close to nature' does not require 'the'. Remove redundant repetition. Use commas to separate clauses.

× Although in my countries there are a lot of places which is very famous.

✓ Although in my country there are a lot of places that are very famous.

Use singular 'country' when referring to the student's own nation. 'Places that are' is correct relative clause with plural 'places' so verb must be 'are', not 'is'. 'Which' can be replaced by 'that' for defining clauses.

× Some of the places are famous for their infrastructure and some of the places are famous for their like history.

✓ Some places are famous for their infrastructure and others are famous for their history.

Avoid 'like' before 'history' — it's unnecessary and ungrammatical here. Use 'others' to avoid repetition and streamline the sentence. 'Some places' is more natural than 'Some of the places' in this context.

× But I love to go outside and explore a new places and try to get a more and more information about that because this type of things help me to reduce my stress.

✓ But I love going outside to explore new places and try to get more and more information about them because these kinds of things help me reduce my stress.

Use gerund 'going' after 'love' or 'love to go' both acceptable; 'explore new places' requires plural agreement. 'Get more and more information' is fine but drop 'a' before 'more information'. Use 'about them' to refer back to 'places'. Use 'these kinds of things' or 'these things' instead of 'this type of things'. Verb agreement: 'help me' is correct, 'reduce my stress' without 'to' is more natural.