Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make your answer more natural and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, use present tense for habits, avoid redundancy, and add one brief specific detail. Use linking words if adding more information.

예시: Yes, I love taking photographs of different views. I usually take a lot of pictures because I want to preserve memories, and I often capture sunsets and interesting street scenes to remember special moments.

제안: Be clear about preference and give a specific reason with better sentence structure. Avoid mixing contradictory examples (urban vs countryside). Use one topic sentence, then a linked supporting detail with a clear reason or example.

예시: I prefer photographing urban areas, especially my hometown, because I enjoy capturing lively streets and old buildings. For example, I like taking photos of the market and historic alleys since they remind me of family outings.

제안: Make the comparison clearer and correct grammar. Use a topic sentence stating your preference, then give a specific reason and an example. Use linking words like 'however' or 'because' to connect ideas.

예시: I prefer views in other countries because they often feel more exciting and unfamiliar. For instance, when I visited Japan I was fascinated by the contrast between modern skyscrapers and traditional temples, which inspired me to take many photos.

× Usually I took a lot of picture of different views because I wanted to memorize.

✓ Usually I take a lot of pictures of different views because I want to remember them.

The student used past tense 'took' and 'wanted' which conflicts with 'Usually' implying habitual present. Also 'picture' should be plural 'pictures', and 'memorize' is awkward; 'remember' is appropriate. Suggest using present simple for habitual actions, plural for countable nouns, and correct verb choice: 'take', 'pictures', 'remember'.

× I prefer to take a picture of the urban area, such as like my hometown, the countryside that's remind me more, memorize memories.

✓ I prefer taking pictures of urban areas, such as my hometown; the countryside reminds me of more memories.

Multiple issues: 'prefer to take a picture of the urban area' should be 'prefer taking pictures of urban areas' (prefer + -ing common, plural for general preference). 'such as like' is redundant; use one word. 'the countryside that's remind me more' has incorrect relative clause and verb form; use 'the countryside reminds me of more memories' or better 'reminds me of my memories'. Also 'memorize memories' is incorrect collocation; 'remember' or 'reminds me of memories' works. Suggest: use 'prefer taking', plural nouns, avoid redundant prepositions, and correct subject-verb agreement 'countryside reminds'.

× Well, I love to my own country, but I prefer to other countries because it's more exciting which I never seen before.

✓ Well, I love my own country, but I prefer other countries because they are more exciting and I have never seen them before.

Errors: 'love to my own country' misuses 'to'; correct is 'love my own country'. 'prefer to other countries' should be 'prefer other countries' (no 'to'). 'it's more exciting which I never seen before' has pronoun-antecedent and tense issues: 'it's' refers to singular, but 'other countries' is plural, so use 'they are'. 'which I never seen before' mixes relative clause and past participle; correct is 'which I have never seen before' or 'and I have never seen them before'. Also use present perfect for life experience. Suggest fixing pronoun reference, removing unnecessary 'to', and using present perfect and plural agreement.

× Usually I took a lot of picture of different views because I wanted to memorize.

✓ Usually I take a lot of pictures of different views because I want to remember them.

'a lot of picture' is incorrect; 'picture' must be plural 'pictures' after 'a lot of'. Use plural for countable nouns. Suggest: 'a lot of pictures'.

× the countryside that's remind me more

✓ the countryside reminds me more

The student used 'remind' with 'the countryside' which requires third person singular verb 'reminds'. Also 'that's' (that is) is unnecessary. Suggest ensuring subject-verb agreement: add -s for third person singular in present simple.