Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammar and conciseness. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and use correct verb forms and countable/uncountable noun forms. Add one specific detail using a linking word to make the answer coherent.

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because I love capturing memorable moments. For example, when I travel I photograph sunsets and local streets to remember the atmosphere and colours.

제안: Make the response more natural and concise. Use a clear topic sentence, replace vague phrases with specific reasons, and add a linking word before a supporting example. Correct grammar: use 'rural areas' without 'the' and avoid filler words.

예시: I prefer views in rural areas because I love natural scenery and quiet landscapes. For instance, I enjoy photographing green fields and rivers, which are more common in the countryside than in the city.

제안: Avoid hesitation, comparisons with poor grammar, and vague reasons. Begin with a direct answer, give two specific reasons with linking words, and avoid absolute statements. Correct comparative forms (e.g., 'better than India') and remove unnecessary words.

예시: I prefer views in Canada at the moment because the air is cleaner and there are more open natural spaces. For example, compared with many Indian cities, Canadian parks and lakes offer clearer scenery that is easier to photograph.

× Yes, of course, I like to taking pictures of a different views because the main reason is I really like to capture the moments that really gives me a happy happiness.

✓ Yes, of course, I like taking pictures of different views because I really like to capture moments that make me happy.

The phrase 'like to taking' mixes the infinitive 'to' with a gerund '-ing'; use either 'like to take' or 'like taking' (here 'like taking' is smoother). 'a different views' has a singular article with a plural noun; use 'different views'. 'the moments that really gives' has subject-verb disagreement: plural 'moments' requires 'give' not 'gives'. 'a happy happiness' is redundant and unnatural; use 'happy' or 'happiness' (here 'make me happy' is natural). Suggestions: remove the extra 'to', use plural noun without 'a', correct verb agreement, and avoid redundant nouns.

× I really prefer the views in the rural areas because the main thing is I really love the nature and mostly these type of things, like a natural ones.

✓ I really prefer views in rural areas because I love nature and mostly these kinds of things, like natural ones.

Use of definite article 'the' before plural general nouns ('views', 'rural areas') is unnecessary. 'the nature' should be 'nature' (uncountable). 'these type of things' is incorrect: 'type' singular with 'these' plural; use 'these kinds of things' or 'this type of thing'. 'a natural ones' mixes singular article 'a' with plural 'ones'; use 'natural ones' or 'a natural one'. Suggestions: remove unnecessary articles, match singular/plural, and use 'kinds of' for plural referents.

× We normally, uh, see that in the rural areas, not in the urban ones.

✓ We normally see those in rural areas, not in urban areas.

'See that' is vague; 'those' refers back to plural 'views' or 'things'. Repeating 'areas' with 'ones' is redundant; use 'urban areas' or 'urban ones' but be consistent. Also remove filler 'uh' and unnecessary commas. Suggestions: use clear referents ('those') and consistent noun forms.

× Umm, actually I'm from India, but now I'm living in Canada.

✓ Actually, I'm from India, but now I live in Canada.

'Living in Canada' is not incorrect, but 'now I'm living' is continuous present which is acceptable; however for habitual/current residence 'I live in Canada' is more natural in this context. 'Umm' is a filler; remove it. Suggestion: use 'I live in Canada' for clarity of current residence.

× Uh, as compared to the India, Canada has uh, many, uh, beautiful views because of the pollution of the traffic and uh, many kind of other factors.

✓ Compared to India, Canada has many beautiful views because of less traffic pollution and many other factors.

Do not use the definite article with country names like 'India' unless the name requires it. 'as compared to the India' is incorrect; use 'compared to India'. 'the pollution of the traffic' is awkward and uses 'the' incorrectly; use 'traffic pollution' or 'pollution from traffic'. 'many kind of other factors' mixes plural/singular; use 'many other factors' or 'many kinds of other factors'. Suggestions: remove unnecessary articles, use natural noun phrases ('traffic pollution'), and fix plural agreement.

× Canada is much more better than the India.

✓ Canada is much better than India.

'More better' is redundant and ungrammatical; use 'much better' or 'more beautiful', not both. Also drop the definite article before 'India'. Suggestion: use one comparative modifier ('much' or 'more') with the comparative adjective ('better').

× So the views are automatically a very beautiful in Canada.

✓ So the views in Canada are naturally very beautiful.

'Automatically' is not the correct adverb here; 'naturally' or 'generally' fits better. 'a very beautiful' incorrectly uses article 'a' with adjective and no noun; 'views' is plural, so remove 'a' and place adjective appropriately. Suggestion: choose appropriate adverb ('naturally') and ensure article and adjective agree with the noun's number.