Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Сосредоточьтесь на более грамматически правильных и кратких ответах. Начните с чётного топик-сентенса, затем добавьте одно или два конкретных объяснения. Устраните лишние слова и повторы, исправьте времена и артикли (например, "I’m that type of person who always takes photos"). Практикуйте связки: "because", "so", "for example" — используйте их экономно и логично.

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. I think photos help preserve memories, so I often take shots to look back on later. For example, I take landscape photos when I travel to remind myself of places I’ve visited.

제안: Исправьте ошибки в структуре и словоупотреблении, делайте короткие предложения и используйте подходящую лексику (например, "calm atmosphere" вместо "calm sphere"). Начинайте с прямого утверждения, затем объясните причину и приведите пример или эффект. Следите за временем и согласованием ("it makes my memories feel warmer").

예시: I prefer taking photos in rural areas because they usually have a calm atmosphere. The peaceful scenes make my photos feel more personal, and when I look at them later they bring back warm memories.

제안: Упростите высказывание: начните с ясного мнения, затем объясните причину и приведите пример. Избегайте повторов (например, многократное «explore») и неверных форм ("I'm indigenous" звучит неуместно — лучше «I’m familiar with my country»). Используйте правильные артикли и множественное число ("monuments").

예시: I prefer taking photos in other countries because I’m already familiar with the sights in my own country. Photographing foreign places lets me discover new cultures and landscapes, which I find exciting.

× Yeah, I definitely that type of person who always take some photos.

✓ Yeah, I'm definitely that type of person who always takes photos.

The sentence omits the verb 'am' and uses the wrong verb form 'take' with singular subject 'person'. Use the contraction 'I'm' (I am) and the third person singular verb 'takes' to agree with 'that type of person who'. Also 'some photos' is wordy; 'photos' is natural. Use: 'I'm definitely the type of person who always takes photos.'

× So because I think that like making some photos may help us in the future to remember all our memories so we can print it and under that like look at them over and over again.

✓ I think taking photos can help us remember our memories in the future, so we can print them and look at them over and over again.

The original is run-on and uses filler words ('so because', 'like', 'under that') and incorrect pronoun reference ('it' for 'photos'). Simplify to a clear clause structure: 'I think taking photos can help us remember our memories in the future, so we can print them and look at them repeatedly.' Use 'photos' plural, so use 'them'.

× So yeah, I definitely decide.

✓ So yeah, I definitely do.

'Decide' is not appropriate in present simple here; the student intends to affirm preference. Use 'do' for emphasis: 'I definitely do.' If meaning 'I decided', use past tense 'I decided.'

× I may say that I'm prefer to make some photos of rural areas because I think in rural areas we can find more calm sphere and like more calm atmosphere, so it's make my memory more warm when I will see this future for those.

✓ I would say that I prefer to take photos of rural areas because they have a calmer atmosphere, which makes my memories feel warmer when I see them in the future.

Incorrect modal 'may' and incorrect 'I'm prefer'. Use 'would say' or 'I may say' but better 'I would say'. 'Prefer' should not have 'to' after 'I'm'. Use 'take photos' not 'make photos'. 'Calm sphere' is unnatural; use 'calmer atmosphere'. 'It's make' is wrong verb form; use 'which makes'. Future clause 'when I will see' should be 'when I see'. Use consistent tense and correct relative pronoun 'which' referring to atmosphere, and plural 'them' for photos.

× I may say that I'm prefer to make some photos of rural areas because I think in rural areas we can find more calm sphere and like more calm atmosphere, so it's make my memory more warm when I will see this future for those.

✓ I would say that I prefer to take photos of rural areas because we can find a calmer atmosphere there, which makes my memories feel warmer when I see them in the future.

Multiple number errors: 'areas' fine, but 'a calmer atmosphere' needs singular article. 'My memory' should be plural 'my memories' or 'my memory feel warmer' needs agreement. 'This future for those' is ungrammatical; use 'in the future' and 'them' referring to photos. Correct articles and pluralization.

× So to be honest, I prefer to make some photos in other countries of use in other countries because I'm indigenous in my country and I have already seen all of monuments in my country, all of you in my country.

✓ To be honest, I prefer to take photos in other countries because I am a native of my country and I have already seen all the monuments there.

'Make photos' should be 'take photos'. 'Of use in other countries' is unclear; remove repetition. 'I'm indigenous in my country' is awkward; use 'I am a native of my country'. 'All of monuments' needs article: 'all the monuments'. 'All of you' is incorrect and likely a misuse of pronoun; remove it. Use 'there' to refer to the country.

× So making photos in other country help me to explore, explore new country, explore new.

✓ So taking photos in other countries helps me explore and discover new places.

Use 'taking' not 'making'. Subject-verb agreement: 'taking photos ... helps me' (singular subject). 'Explore, explore new country, explore new' is repetitive and ungrammatical; simplify to 'explore and discover new places' and pluralize 'countries' or use 'places'.