Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is clear and relevant, but it is a bit long-winded and includes repetition. Aim for a concise topic sentence, then one brief supporting detail using a linking word. Try to use a slightly wider range of vocabulary (e.g., "preserve" or "record") and correct small grammar issues ("wherever we go on vacation" instead of "for a vacation"). Keep responses to no more than 3–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, I do. I enjoy taking photos of different views because I like to preserve memories from trips; for example, I always photograph sunsets and cityscapes when I travel. This helps me remember the atmosphere of each place.

제안: The answer attempts to address the question but has several problems: grammatical errors, many hesitations/fillers, an unfinished thought, and an unclear final point. Structure your response with a clear topic sentence (state a preference or say it depends), one specific supporting example, and a brief contrasting point if needed. Remove fillers, complete your sentences, and use accurate grammar ("It depends on the view," "there is a beach near my house").

예시: It depends on the scene, but I often prefer urban views because of the lively architecture and street life. For instance, living in Mumbai, I often photograph the beach near my house at sunset because the contrast between the city skyline and the sea is striking.

제안: This answer communicates the main idea but is slightly awkward and contains grammatical errors and informal phrases ("click the pictures," "in abroad"). Be more concise: give a topic sentence, then one specific reason and an example. Use correct prepositions and natural collocations ("take photos," "abroad").

예시: I don't mind whether the views are in my country or abroad; it depends on the scenery. For example, I love photographing mountains, so I will travel wherever there are impressive peaks, whether at home or overseas.

× It's depend on the view actually, umm, some places in the urban areas very beautiful.

✓ It depends on the view actually; some places in urban areas are very beautiful.

The verb 'depend' needs third person singular present form 'depends' to agree with the subject 'It'. Also the clause 'some places in the urban areas very beautiful' lacks the verb 'are' and has an unnecessary definite article 'the' before 'urban areas'. Use 'are' for plural subject and omit 'the' when speaking generally about urban areas.

× For example, I live in Mumbai and there is a beach outside my house.

✓ For example, I live in Mumbai and there is a beach outside my house.

Sentence is grammatically correct for 'there is' to introduce the existence of a singular noun 'a beach'. No correction needed.

× So I would love to take pictures of those movements.

✓ So I would love to take pictures of those moments.

The speaker likely meant 'moments' (times/experiences) rather than 'movements'. 'Movements' is a different noun. Use the correct noun to convey intended meaning.

× Umm, on the other hand, uh, my background, uh, my.

✓ Umm, on the other hand, my background is different.

The original fragment is incomplete and lacks a main verb and object. Completing the sentence with 'my background is different' provides a clear subject-verb structure and expresses contrast.

× Well, I love photography so it depends on the views with the sceneries not of the countries.

✓ Well, I love photography, so it depends on the scenery rather than on the country.

Use 'scenery' (uncountable) instead of 'sceneries', and rephrase 'not of the countries' to 'rather than on the country' for clarity. Also insert a comma before 'so' to separate clauses.

× For example, I love to click the pictures of mountains so it could be found anywhere in my country or in abroad as well.

✓ For example, I love to take pictures of mountains, so they can be found anywhere in my country or abroad as well.

Use 'take pictures' instead of 'click the pictures' in natural English. 'Mountains' is plural, so use plural pronoun 'they' and verb 'can be found'. Use 'abroad' without 'in'. Add a comma before 'so' and ensure subject-verb agreement.