Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repeating device details unless relevant, correct minor grammar (article use, plural forms), and use linking words for flow. Limit to at most 3–4 short sentences. Add one specific example to make it more vivid.

예시: Yes, I really enjoy photographing different views, especially when I travel. My iPhone has a wide-angle lens, so I often capture expansive landscapes or striking city buildings. For example, last summer I photographed a dramatic coastline at sunset, which showed both the sea and cliffs in one frame.

제안: Remove hesitations, fix comparison phrasing, and make the reason structure clearer using linking words (because, so). Provide specific details or examples (sounds, sights) to support your preference. Keep it to 2–3 sentences and correct incorrect comparative phrasing.

예시: I prefer rural views because they are more peaceful and have cleaner air. Also, the scenery—like rolling hills and quiet farms—feels more relaxing than busy city streets, so I enjoy photographing them when I travel.

제안: Begin with a direct topic sentence, correct grammar (add subjects and articles), and use linking words to organise details (for example, furthermore). Be specific about locations and give one clear example or memory to make the answer more engaging. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

예시: I prefer views in my own country. I live in Italy, which I consider one of the most beautiful places in the world. For example, our coastline and the Dolomites offer completely different but equally stunning scenery, so I enjoy photographing both seaside villages and snowy mountain peaks.

× I love taking pictures with my iPhone.

✓ I love taking pictures with my iPhone.

No correction needed; sentence is grammatical. 'Taking' correctly functions as a gerund after 'love'.

× I have an iPhone 17 and it has normal camera and widely angled range camera.

✓ I have an iPhone 17 and it has a normal camera and a wide-angle camera.

Missing articles before singular countable nouns and incorrect adjective form. Use 'a' before 'normal camera' and 'a' before 'wide-angle camera'. 'Wide-angle' is the correct compound adjective; 'widely angled range camera' is unidiomatic. Suggestion: add 'a' and use 'wide-angle camera'.

× So I'd like to take a pictures of landscapes or city building while I'm traveling.

✓ So I'd like to take pictures of landscapes or city buildings while I'm traveling.

Article and number error: 'a pictures' is incorrect because 'pictures' is plural; remove 'a'. 'city building' should be plural 'city buildings' to match 'landscapes' and general meaning. Suggestion: either 'take a picture of a city building' (singular) or 'take pictures of city buildings' (plural). Use consistent number.

× I prefer views uh rural areas because uh they are beautiful rather to cities are more colorful and have better landscapes.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because they are beautiful, whereas cities are more colorful and have different kinds of scenery.

Missing preposition 'in' before 'rural areas'. 'rather to' is incorrect; use 'whereas' or 'while' to contrast. 'have better landscapes' is a value judgment; 'different kinds of scenery' is clearer. Also remove filler 'uh'. Suggestion: use 'in rural areas' and a proper contrastive conjunction like 'whereas'.

× I prefer fresh air and also peaceful and relaxing.

✓ I prefer the fresh air and I also prefer places that are peaceful and relaxing.

Sentence lacks parallel structure and articles. 'prefer fresh air and also peaceful and relaxing' mixes noun and adjectives without a proper noun to attach them to. Adding 'the' before 'fresh air' and repeating 'prefer' or rephrasing to 'places that are peaceful and relaxing' fixes structure. Suggestion: keep parallel elements and include necessary articles.

× I prefer the views in my own country.

✓ I prefer the views in my own country.

No correction needed; present simple correctly expresses a general preference.

× I live in Italy and I think is one of the most beautiful places in the world.

✓ I live in Italy and I think it is one of the most beautiful places in the world.

Missing subject 'it' in the clause 'I think it is'. Every finite clause needs a subject. Suggestion: include 'it' after 'I think'.

× We have a very diverse landscapes along coastline and high mountains like Dolomites and of course the Alps.

✓ We have very diverse landscapes along the coastline and high mountains like the Dolomites and, of course, the Alps.

Article and number issues: 'a very diverse landscapes' mixes singular article with plural noun; remove 'a'. 'coastline' as a specific feature needs the definite article 'the coastline'. Mountain range names typically take 'the' (the Dolomites, the Alps). Also add commas for clarity. Suggestion: match articles to singular/plural nouns and use 'the' with named ranges.

× Many beautiful rural areas.

✓ There are many beautiful rural areas.

Sentence lacks a verb and subject; it's a sentence fragment. Adding 'There are' (the 'there be' construction) creates a complete sentence. Suggestion: use 'There are many beautiful rural areas' or integrate into previous sentence.