Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more accurate and concise. Correct errors (e.g., 'pieces' -> 'beaches' or 'peaks'; 'their landscape are' -> 'their landscapes are'), use a clear topic sentence, and add one specific detail to support why you enjoy it. Keep to 2–4 sentences and avoid repetition.

예시: Yes, I love photographing different views, especially mountain peaks and beaches, because their landscapes are breathtaking. For example, I recently photographed a sunset over a mountain ridge and captured the changing colors, which helps me remember how peaceful it felt.

제안: Improve grammar and fluency: use correct comparative form ('prefer X to Y'), remove hesitations, and give one specific reason with linking words (e.g., 'because' or 'so'). Avoid vague phrases and keep sentences well connected.

예시: I prefer views in rural areas to those in urban areas because rural landscapes, such as mountains and green forests, feel more tranquil. For instance, I enjoy breathing fresh air at sunrise while watching the sky change colors.

제안: Remove filler words, correct grammar and word order, and be specific: use plural/singular correctly ('landscapes like mountains, hills, and rivers'), and complete the final thought clearly. Add a brief example or comparison to support the preference.

예시: I prefer views in my own country because it has diverse natural landscapes, such as mountains, hills, and rivers. For example, I often visit a nearby river valley that is popular with tourists for its clear water and scenic walking trails.

× Yes, I love photographing different views, especially pieces and mountains because their landscape are very breathtaking.

✓ Yes, I love photographing different views, especially beaches and mountains because their landscapes are very breathtaking.

The student used 'pieces' incorrectly; likely intended 'beaches' (vocabulary error but treated as adjective/noun misuse). Also 'landscape' should be plural 'landscapes' to agree with plural possessive 'their', and 'their landscapes are' requires plural verb 'are' which is fine; ensure noun agreement. Suggest replacing 'pieces' with correct noun and make 'landscapes' plural.

× I like to preserve them as a memory and look back and remember how peaceful the place felt.

✓ I like to preserve them as memories and look back to remember how peaceful the place feels.

'a memory' should be plural 'memories' because 'them' refers to multiple photos. 'Look back and remember' is redundant; 'look back to remember' flows better. Tense consistency: asking about general preference requires present simple 'feels' instead of past 'felt'. Suggest using plural 'memories' and present 'feels'.

× I prefer views in rural areas than urban areas.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas to urban areas.

When comparing preferences, use 'prefer A to B', not 'prefer A than B'. Replace 'than' with 'to' for correct comparative structure.

× Rural areas have breathtaking landscapes like mountain and green forest.

✓ Rural areas have breathtaking landscapes like mountains and green forests.

When giving examples after 'like', use plural nouns to match 'landscapes' or use singular with articles; here plural 'mountains' and 'green forests' agree with 'landscapes'. Suggest pluralizing these nouns.

× I definitely enjoy fresh breath, uh taking air and the beautiful view of sunrise.

✓ I definitely enjoy the fresh air and the beautiful view of the sunrise.

'Fresh breath' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'fresh air'. 'Taking air' is awkward and unnecessary. Include definite article 'the' before 'fresh air' and 'sunrise' for specificity. Suggest using 'the fresh air' and 'the sunrise'.

× Umm I prefer views in my country because my country is naturally beautiful with various landscape like mountain, hills, rivers.

✓ Umm I prefer views in my country because my country is naturally beautiful with various landscapes like mountains, hills, and rivers.

Use plural 'landscapes' to match 'various'. Also pluralize 'mountain' to 'mountains' and add commas and 'and' to list items. Ensure parallel plural forms when listing.

× It is one of the most famous countries for touristic destination I.

✓ It is one of the most famous countries as a tourist destination.

Original sentence has incorrect word order and wrong word forms: 'touristic destination' is unnatural; correct phrase is 'tourist destination'. The stray 'I' at the end is erroneous. Restructure to 'one of the most famous countries as a tourist destination.' Suggest using 'tourist destination' and removing the extra 'I'.