Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more natural and precise: use correct words (e.g., “views,” “mountains,” “waterfalls”) and avoid filler sounds like “uh” or “umm.” Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Keep it concise (no more than 3–4 sentences). Also correct grammar in the second sentence (use plural/singular consistently and prepositions: “take pictures of my friends and family”).

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. For example, I often photograph mountain landscapes and waterfalls when I travel. I also like taking portraits of my friends and family during outings to capture memories.

제안: Make a clear topic sentence stating your preference, then give specific reasons and use linking words (because, so, therefore). Correct grammar: say “I prefer rural areas” and avoid redundant phrases. Keep sentences shorter and coherent, and correct noun/verb forms: “a person who really likes nature,” “I usually bring my camera when I go hiking.”

예시: I prefer rural areas because I enjoy nature and peaceful landscapes. When I go hiking, I usually bring my camera so I can capture scenic views like valleys and forests. This makes my photos more natural and varied.

제안: Be concise and correct: say “I don’t have a preference between my country and other countries.” Remove awkward phrasing and use linking words (“as long as,” “wherever”). Give a short reason and one example to be specific. Avoid repeating the same idea twice.

예시: I don't have a preference between views in my country and other countries, as long as the scenery is beautiful. For instance, I enjoy photographing both local coastal cliffs and foreign city skylines when they look visually striking.

× Uh, yes, I really like taking pictures of different wheels, umm for example mountains wheel or water force wheel.

✓ Uh, yes, I really like taking pictures of different views, for example mountain views or waterfalls.

The student used 'wheels' and 'water force wheel' which are incorrect nouns here. This is a singular/plural and word-choice issue: 'views' is the correct plural for scenes, 'mountain views' or 'mountains' and 'waterfalls' are the correct nouns. Suggestion: learn common collocations for scenery (e.g. 'mountain views', 'waterfalls') and replace incorrect nouns with these collocations. (Note: This correction follows the 'Singular and plural issue' category because the main problem is incorrect noun forms and pluralization.)

× And I really like to take a picture for my partners and my family members.

✓ And I really like to take pictures of my partners and my family members.

The original uses 'take a picture for' which is incorrect collocation. Use 'take pictures of' to indicate photographing people. Also plural 'pictures' fits general habit. Suggestion: use 'take a picture of someone' or 'take pictures of someone' to express photographing people. (Category mapped to 'Incorrect use of prepositions' and 'Article errors' because the preposition and article/number were wrong.)

× I would prefer the rural areas will umm I am really a persons really like nature so I will usually bring my camera to hiking so that I can capture the views I like during the hiking.

✓ I prefer rural areas. I really like nature, so I usually bring my camera when I go hiking so that I can capture the views I like.

Multiple issues: 'I would prefer the rural areas will' is incorrect structure — use simple 'I prefer rural areas' (tense/structure). 'I am really a persons really like nature' mixes singular/plural and word order; correct is 'I really like nature.' 'Bring my camera to hiking' uses wrong preposition; correct is 'bring my camera when I go hiking' or 'bring my camera on hikes.' Suggestions: use simple present 'I prefer' for general preferences, use subject-verb agreement ('I like'), and correct prepositions for activities ('go hiking', 'on hikes'). (Mapped mainly to 'Subject-verb agreement errors' and 'Incorrect use of prepositions'.)

× I don't have a preference for the wheels in my country or in the foreign country.

✓ I don't have a preference for the views in my country or in other countries.

The student again used 'wheels' incorrectly; correct noun is 'views'. 'In the foreign country' is awkward; use 'in other countries' or 'abroad'. Also article 'the' is unnecessary before 'views' in this context. Suggestion: use 'other countries' or 'abroad' and the plural 'views'. (Mapped to 'Article errors' and 'Singular and plural issue'.)

× So only it is a beautiful scenery, I would like to take a picture.

✓ As long as it is a beautiful scene, I would like to take a picture.

The original sentence has incorrect word order ('So only it is') and wrong noun choice 'scenery' used with 'a' — 'scenery' is an uncountable noun, while 'scene' or 'scenery' without 'a' would be correct. 'As long as' conveys the intended condition. Suggestion: use 'As long as it is a beautiful scene' or 'If the scenery is beautiful, I would like to take a picture.' (Mapped to 'Sentence structure errors'.)