Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid vague phrases like "a nice aesthetic"; describe what you like about sunsets (colours, mood, lighting). Keep to under five sentences.

예시: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views, especially sunsets. I like them because the warm colours and soft light create strong contrasts and a peaceful mood, which makes photos look striking and calming.

제안: Answer directly and correct word choice and grammar. Use a topic sentence, then one clear reason with a linking word. Replace awkward words like "abandoned" with "untouched" or "natural" and fix sentence punctuation.

예시: I prefer rural views to urban ones because they are more peaceful and have richer, more dramatic colours. For example, rolling fields and forests often show stronger contrasts at sunrise or sunset, which I find more appealing.

제안: Avoid negative or absolute statements about your country and be honest but diplomatic. Give a clear topic sentence, then one specific reason or a conditional statement. Keep language natural and fix grammar/repetition.

예시: I would like views in other countries because I’m curious to see different landscapes and cultures. However, I haven’t traveled yet, partly because of limited opportunities at the moment, so I mostly enjoy exploring local spots despite some urban congestion.

× Yes, I do like taking pictures of different views, especially the sunset. It brings out this beautiful picture that is a nice aesthetic.

✓ Yes, I do like taking pictures of different views, especially of sunsets. They bring out beautiful images and look aesthetically pleasing.

Original sentences have awkward phrasing and minor noun-number mismatch. 'the sunset' is too specific; 'sunsets' as a general preference fits the question. 'It brings out this beautiful picture that is a nice aesthetic' is unidiomatic: 'bring out' should refer to plural 'sunsets' -> 'they bring out'. Replace 'picture' with 'images' and 'a nice aesthetic' with 'aesthetically pleasing' to use correct adjective/adverb forms and natural collocation. Suggestion: use plural when speaking generally and choose common collocations (aesthetically pleasing).

× Both fields are great actually, but the views in the rural areas are more peaceful, they have a greater contrast and more dramatic colours since the nature there is abandoned.

✓ Both are great actually, but rural views are more peaceful; they have greater contrast and more dramatic colours because the natural landscapes are less developed.

Problems: 'Both fields' is odd — the question contrasted urban and rural areas, so 'Both' or 'Both are great' is clearer. 'in the rural areas' wordy; use 'rural views'. Use semicolon or separate clauses instead of comma splice. 'since the nature there is abandoned' is ungrammatical and unclear: 'nature is abandoned' is not idiomatic. Use 'because the natural landscapes are less developed' to express why colours/contrast stand out. Also fixed article use and wording for clarity and correctness.

× I prefer views in other countries, though I haven't been.

✓ I prefer views in other countries, even though I haven't been to them.

Missing object after 'been': 'haven't been' is acceptable alone but can be ambiguous. Adding 'to them' clarifies reference to other countries. 'Though' is fine but 'even though' is slightly more natural here. Tense usage remains present preference with present perfect for experience; keep present perfect 'haven't been' to indicate lack of experience up to now.

× I haven't been to other countries because our own country is dirty and it's overcrowded and the views are just like off.

✓ I haven't been to other countries because our country is dirty and overcrowded, and the views are just off.

Issues: 'our own country' is wordy; 'our country' is sufficient. 'it's overcrowded' is better as simply 'overcrowded' to avoid repeating pronoun. 'the views are just like off' is ungrammatical: 'just off' is colloquial and awkward — use 'just off' or better 'just not very good' or 'off' alone. Here 'the views are just off' is corrected to be concise and grammatical. Also combined clauses for smoother flow.