Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the response more natural and concise. Start with a direct topic sentence, correct grammar (verb forms, articles), and limit to up to five sentences. Add one specific example and use linking words for coherence. For example, replace fragmented phrases with clear clauses and use words like “so” or “for example” to connect ideas.

예시: Yes — I enjoy photographing different views because it helps me remember places I’ve visited. For example, I often take landscape photos when I travel to capture light and color at sunset. This way, I can open my album later and relive those moments.

제안: Answer directly and correct sentence structure and word choice. Use a clear topic sentence stating your preference, then give one or two specific reasons connected by linking words (because, therefore). Avoid small errors and unclear phrases; pay attention to punctuation and word order.

예시: I prefer urban views because I enjoy vibrant, busy environments. For example, I like watching city streets at night where lights and cafés create a lively atmosphere, which makes me feel energetic rather than lonely.

제안: Start with a clear direct answer (preference), then support it with a specific reason and an example. Correct grammar (use articles, verb forms, and connectors) and avoid fragmented sentences. Mention whether you prefer local views or foreign ones and explain why briefly.

예시: I usually prefer views in my own country because Vietnam’s traditional architecture feels familiar and comforting. For instance, I enjoy visiting old pagodas and colonial buildings which remind me of family stories and local festivals.

× Well, I'm the kind person that loving discovery and contemplate beautiful landscape, so taking a pictures of different views can be a useful way for me to record, memorize and when I miss them, I can open my photo album and rewatch it again.

✓ Well, I'm the kind of person who loves discovering and contemplating beautiful landscapes, so taking pictures of different views is a useful way for me to record and remember them; when I miss them, I can open my photo album and look at them again.

Multiple errors: 'the kind person' needs 'the kind of person' (incorrect adjective phrase), 'that loving discovery and contemplate' should be 'who loves discovering and contemplating' (incorrect relative clause and verb forms — third person singular 'loves' and verb + -ing for parallel gerunds), 'beautiful landscape' should be plural 'beautiful landscapes' (singular/plural), 'taking a pictures' should be 'taking pictures' (article with plural incorrect), 'can be a useful way for me to record, memorize' — use 'is a useful way for me to record and remember them' (better verb choice and parallel structure), and 'rewatch it again' is wrong for photos; use 'look at them again' and avoid redundant 'again'. Suggest practicing relative clauses with 'who' for people, subject-verb agreement for third person singular, using gerunds for activities, correct article use with countable nouns, and maintaining parallel structure in lists.

× Personally, I adore views in urban areas than rural areas because I'm a kind of person who love a bustling atmosphere and I think that urban areas can help me feel more. Peace in my and not be lonely.

✓ Personally, I prefer views in urban areas to rural areas because I'm the kind of person who loves a bustling atmosphere, and I think that urban areas help me feel less lonely and more at peace.

Errors: 'adore views in urban areas than rural areas' should be 'prefer ... to' (incorrect comparison form), 'who love' should be 'who loves' (third person singular agreement), 'can help me feel more. Peace in my and not be lonely' is ungrammatical and fragmented — correct to 'help me feel less lonely and more at peace' (proper word order and collocations). Suggest reviewing subject-verb agreement for 'who' relative clauses, using 'prefer X to Y' for comparisons, and common collocations 'at peace' and 'less lonely'.

× I'm a Vietnamese and Vietnam is an Asian country that rich in tradition and culture. So in traditional architecture of Vietnam can help me feel familiar and help my life feel more comfortable.

✓ I'm Vietnamese, and Vietnam is an Asian country that is rich in tradition and culture. Its traditional architecture makes me feel familiar and makes my life feel more comfortable.

Errors: 'I'm a Vietnamese' — nationality adjectives usually omit the article: 'I'm Vietnamese' (article error), 'that rich in tradition' missing verb 'is' (sentence structure/present tense error), 'So in traditional architecture of Vietnam can help me feel familiar' is ungrammatical: better 'Its traditional architecture makes me feel familiar' or 'makes me feel at home.' Also 'help my life feel more comfortable' is awkward; use 'makes my life feel more comfortable.' Suggest practicing noun/adjective use for nationalities, including the verb 'to be' in relative clauses ('that is rich'), and using clear subject-verb structures like 'Its X makes me feel Y.'