Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details with correct verb forms and natural phrasing. Avoid redundancy (e.g., "different views" repeated) and filler words. Use linking words like "because" or "so" to connect ideas.

예시: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views. When I travel, I take many photos of landscapes and cityscapes because they help me remember places and moods later.

제안: Give a direct preference or clearly state you like both, then provide two specific contrasts with better vocabulary and fewer hesitations. Use linking words ("on the one hand... on the other hand") and avoid fillers ("uh", "like"). Be precise about what appeals to you in each setting.

예시: I like both urban and rural views. On the one hand, cities interest me because of the busy streets and striking architecture; on the other hand, rural areas appeal to me with peaceful landscapes and natural colors.

제안: Answer directly and correct misused phrases. Start with a clear statement of preference, then give a specific reason and one example. Use correct verb tenses and noun forms ("I love traveling", "I take photos to remember"). Avoid vague phrases like "How was it earlier?"

예시: I prefer taking photos in other countries because I enjoy discovering new landscapes. For example, when I visited Japan last year I photographed quiet forests and temples to remember the trip.

× For me it is interesting hobby for different peoples because when I'm traveling I am taking a lot of pictures of a different views and also after that I can to I can revision this.

✓ For me it is an interesting hobby for different people because when I'm traveling I take a lot of pictures of different views and afterward I can review them.

Errors: 'interesting hobby' needs article 'an'; 'different peoples' should be 'different people' (quantifier/plural noun); 'I am taking' is an unnecessary continuous form—use simple present 'I take' for habitual action; 'a different views' has incorrect article and plural—use 'different views'; 'I can to I can revision this' uses wrong verb forms: remove extra 'to', use 'review' (verb) and refer to 'them' (the pictures). Suggestion: use correct articles, plural nouns, simple present for habits, and correct verb forms.

× I prefer both types of taking pictures and I can explain why in urban areas, I find it so like typical and I love this traffic jams and these like speedy, uh, speed over the town and in rural areas because of the nature and it's really beautiful and gorgeous.

✓ I prefer both types of places to take pictures of, and I can explain why. In urban areas, I find the scenes typical and I like the traffic and the fast pace of the city. In rural areas, I like the natural scenery because it is really beautiful.

Errors: 'types of taking pictures' is awkward—use 'types of places to take pictures of'; 'I find it so like typical' contains filler and wrong structure—use 'I find the scenes typical'; 'I love this traffic jams' has article and number errors—use 'I like the traffic' (no article for uncountable); 'these like speedy, uh, speed over the town' is ungrammatical—use 'the fast pace of the city'; 'because of the nature' should be 'because of the natural scenery' or 'because of nature'; 'it's really beautiful and gorgeous' is redundant—use one adjective. Suggestions: simplify phrasing, use simple present for preferences, correct countable/uncountable nouns and adjective choices.

× How was it earlier? I love travel in the different countries, so everywhere doing pictures in the other countries because it's more peaceful and for me to review this forest later and I often taking pictures for remembering.

✓ Earlier? I love traveling to different countries, so I take pictures everywhere I go in other countries because it is more peaceful, and I can review the photos of the forests later. I often take pictures to remember places.

Errors: 'I love travel in the different countries' should use gerund/infinitive: 'I love traveling to different countries' (verb + -ing or 'to travel to'); 'everywhere doing pictures in the other countries' is ungrammatical—use 'I take pictures everywhere I go in other countries'; 'for me to review this forest later' incorrect phrasing—use 'I can review the photos of the forests later'; 'I often taking pictures for remembering' mixes forms—use simple present 'I often take pictures to remember' and 'to remember' rather than 'for remembering'. Suggestions: use gerunds for activities, simple present for habitual actions, correct infinitive purpose 'to remember' and clear noun phrases ('photos of the forest').

× For me it is an interesting hobby for different people because when I'm traveling I take a lot of pictures of different views and afterward I can review them.

✓ For me, it is an interesting hobby because when I'm traveling I take a lot of pictures of different views and afterward I can review them.

Issue: Redundant phrase 'for different people' in original is incorrect in context and could confuse pronoun reference. Removing it clarifies that the hobby is personal. Also add comma after 'For me' for clarity. Suggestion: keep pronoun references clear and avoid unnecessary phrases that change meaning.

× I prefer both types of places to take pictures of, and I can explain why. In urban areas, I find the scenes typical and I like the traffic and the fast pace of the city. In rural areas, I like the natural scenery because it is really beautiful.

✓ I prefer both types of places to take pictures of, and I can explain why. In urban areas, I find the scenes typical and I like the traffic and the fast pace of the city. In rural areas, I like the natural scenery because it is really beautiful.

Minor article errors in earlier version: use 'the scenes' to refer to the previously mentioned urban scenes; 'the traffic' is appropriate for general traffic in a city; 'the fast pace of the city' uses 'the' to specify that pace. Suggestion: use definite article 'the' when referring to specific or previously mentioned nouns.