Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct small grammar mistakes; start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words (uh), and give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Also watch article and countable noun usage (e.g., “a pictures” → “pictures” or “a picture”).

예시: Yes, I really enjoy taking pictures of different views. For example, I often photograph mountain sunrises because I like the changing colors and peaceful atmosphere, and I also capture candid moments of people to preserve memories.

제안: Answer directly and correct vocabulary; avoid repetition and filler. Use a clear contrast with linking words (e.g., “rather than”), correct collocations (“countryside” not “Porsche area”), and give one specific reason or example.

예시: I prefer views in rural areas rather than urban ones because the countryside has quiet trails and mountain scenery, so I can relax and take better landscape photos.

제안: Begin with a clear statement of preference and give specific reasons succinctly. Avoid hesitation and repetition; correct phrases like “BC” should be introduced as “British Columbia (BC)” and grammar like “it has a hills” → “it has hills.”

예시: I prefer views in my current country; for instance, British Columbia has hills and deep valleys with mild weather, so its coastal and mountain scenery is especially beautiful.

× I love to take a pictures, specially, uh, myself, but I also love to take pictures of uh, I love to capture the moments and the views, especially the mountains, the sunrise and the sunset.

✓ I love to take pictures, especially of myself, but I also love to capture moments and views, especially the mountains, the sunrise, and the sunset.

The phrase 'a pictures' uses the singular article 'a' with a plural noun 'pictures' which is incorrect (Article errors). Remove 'a' and use plural 'pictures'. 'Specially' should be 'especially'. Also remove the extra 'the' before 'moments' and 'views' for natural phrasing; articles before plural nouns are optional when speaking generally. Use commas to separate items in a list for clarity.

× I personally prefer to, uh, to go to the countryside area rather than the Porsche area because there is a nature and I love to spend time in the beauty of the nature and, uh, so rural areas have, uh, the mountains, the, the scenic view.

✓ I personally prefer to go to the countryside rather than the city area because there is nature there, and I love spending time enjoying the beauty of nature. Rural areas have mountains and scenic views.

Multiple issues: awkward phrasing and redundancy create sentence structure errors (Sentence structure errors). 'To, uh, to go' repeats 'to' unnecessarily. 'Porsche area' seems to be a wrong word; 'city area' fits contrasted meaning. 'There is a nature' incorrectly uses the article with an uncountable noun (Article errors), so use 'there is nature' or 'there is a lot of nature'. Use gerund 'spending' after 'love' when describing an activity. Remove repeated 'the' and use plural 'views' to match context.

× As I am currently living in Canada, I love the BC it's the most beautiful area in the, uh, Canada as it has a hills, it has valleys and uh, it doesn't uh, uh, cold so much and uh, I love the I love the scenic view.

✓ As I am currently living in Canada, I love BC. It's the most beautiful area in Canada because it has hills and valleys, and it isn't very cold, and I love the scenic views.

Article misuse and redundancy (Article errors). Do not use 'the' before 'BC' or 'Canada' in this context. 'It has a hills' mixes plural noun with singular article; remove 'a' so 'it has hills'. Use 'isn't very cold' for the negative construction instead of 'doesn't cold so much'. Use plural 'views' to match typical usage. Also remove duplicate phrase 'I love the'.