Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the answer more natural and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, give one or two specific examples with brief reasons, and avoid repetition and grammatical errors. Use linking words (for example, because) correctly. Keep to 2–4 sentences. Also correct plural/singular and article use (e.g., "pictures" not "picture").

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because photography helps me notice details I would otherwise miss. For example, I often photograph flowers and landscapes when I go walking, and I also take candid shots of friends to capture happy moments.

제안: Be specific and correct grammar: state your preference clearly, give one or two concrete reasons with correct noun–verb agreement, and avoid unclear references (e.g., "car"). Use linking words like "because" and "so" and keep to 2–3 sentences. Replace vague words with precise descriptions (e.g., "quiet atmosphere" instead of "cozy vibes").

예시: I prefer photographing rural areas because their quiet atmosphere and wide open spaces help me compose peaceful images. For example, I like capturing winding country lanes and small farms at sunset, which create a calm, relaxed mood in my photos.

제안: Answer directly and complete the sentence: say which you prefer and give a clear, specific reason with an example. Avoid repetition and incomplete endings, and use correct phrasing (e.g., "views in other countries" not "other countries of view"). Keep to 2–3 sentences and use linking words (e.g., "because", "for example").

예시: I prefer views in other countries because their architecture and landscapes are often very different from what I see at home, which inspires me. For example, I enjoy photographing historic European streets or tropical coastlines because they offer fresh subjects and colors that excite me.

× Mainly this is because I just really like taking picture of everything.

✓ Mainly this is because I just really like taking pictures of everything.

The noun 'picture' should be plural ('pictures') after 'taking' because the speaker refers to photographing many things. Use the -s to show plural countable nouns after verbs like 'taking' when the meaning is general and plural. Suggestion: Use 'taking pictures of ...' when referring to photographing multiple items.

× For example, I take picture of flowers, landscapes and my friends.

✓ For example, I take pictures of flowers, landscapes, and my friends.

Same issue: 'picture' needs to be plural ('pictures') because multiple items are being photographed. Also add a comma before 'and' in a list for clarity. Suggestion: Use plural 'pictures' when listing several types of things you photograph.

× This is because rural areas gives me cosy vibes and car makes me feel calm and relaxed which I really like it.

✓ This is because rural areas give me cosy vibes, and cars make me feel calm and relaxed, which I really like.

'Rural areas' is plural, so the verb should be 'give' not 'gives'. Also 'car' should be plural 'cars' if speaking generally, so the verb becomes 'make' not 'makes'. The clause 'which I really like it' is redundant: use 'which I really like' without 'it'. Commas improve readability. Suggestion: Ensure subject and verb agree in number (singular/plural) and avoid redundant pronouns in relative clauses.

× Well in my opinion I prefer other countries of view because other countries have different vibe from my country like buildings and landscapes totally different from my country which makes me feel happy and.

✓ Well, in my opinion I prefer the views in other countries because they have a different vibe from my country, such as buildings and landscapes that are totally different, which makes me feel happy.

This sentence has several structural problems: 'other countries of view' is incorrect — use 'the views in other countries' or 'views in other countries'. 'Different vibe' should be 'a different vibe' and it's clearer to refer back to 'they' (other countries) to avoid repetition. The fragment ends with an incomplete 'and.' Also add commas and a relative clause to connect ideas: 'such as buildings and landscapes that are totally different'. Suggestion: Rephrase to a clear subject ('they' or 'other countries') and complete the final clause; ensure articles like 'a' are used before singular nouns like 'vibe'.