Chatting— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Keep the natural tone but reduce filler and minor repetition. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons with brief examples. Use linking words like "because" or "so" to connect ideas and avoid wordiness (e.g., remove "by chatting with friends" repetition).

예시: Yes, I do. I prefer chatting with close friends because it helps me relax after a long day and share what’s on my mind, so I feel less stressed. For example, after work I often call a friend to talk about a funny moment from the day.

제안: Be more specific and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give two concrete examples rather than vague phrases. Use linking words like "also" or "for example" to make the answer coherent and avoid fillers like "umm".

예시: We usually talk about our daily routines and personal updates. Also, we discuss TV dramas and online shows; for example, we recently compared our favorite scenes from a popular series.

제안: Good clarity—shorten and strengthen the opening sentence and add a brief reason or example. Use a linking word like "because" to show cause and avoid hesitation words.

예시: I prefer chatting one-on-one because I’m introverted and feel more comfortable sharing personal thoughts. For example, I often meet a close friend for coffee to discuss problems in depth.

제안: Be concise and choose clear vocabulary. Start with a direct preference, give a reason, then offer an alternative. Replace vague words like "stuff" with specific phrases such as "facial expressions" and use "however" to introduce the alternative.

예시: I prefer face-to-face communication because it creates a stronger sense of connection and I can read facial expressions. However, if we can’t meet, I like video calls so I can still see their expressions.

제안: Remove hesitations and be precise. Start with a clear statement, give a reason, and provide a short example of how you handle conflicts. Avoid overly casual or exaggerated terms like "wars."

예시: Usually I don’t. I consider myself a peacemaker, so I try to avoid conflicts and mediate when friends disagree; for example, I listen to both sides and help find a compromise.

× Well, absolutely I do.

✓ Well, I absolutely do.

The adverb 'absolutely' should modify the verb phrase 'do' and is more naturally placed after the introductory 'Well' or before the main verb. Move 'absolutely' to follow the introductory word for clearer, more natural sentence flow.

× Although I'm not an extroverted person, I still like to chat with my friends, especially my close ones.

✓ Although I'm not an extroverted person, I still like chatting with my friends, especially my close ones.

Using 'like to chat' is not incorrect, but 'like chatting' is more idiomatic when describing a general preference. Keep present continuous/generic present sense consistent by using the -ing form after 'like'.

× I think it's a way for me to wind down after a long day, and by chatting with friends, I can let my thoughts out and feel less overwhelmed about life.

✓ I think it's a way for me to wind down after a long day; by chatting with friends I can let my thoughts out and feel less overwhelmed by life.

The original uses a comma splice and awkward preposition 'about life'. Replace the comma with a semicolon or separate sentences, and use 'overwhelmed by life' which is the correct collocation.

× Well, usually I chat with them about our daily lives and just to update about each other umm.

✓ Well, usually I chat with them about our daily lives and just to update each other.

The original combines unequal structures: 'chat about' and 'to update' without parallel form. Use parallel verb structures: 'chat about' and 'update each other'. Also remove filler 'umm' in corrected sentence.

× Besides we also chat a lot about dramas online umm stuff.

✓ We also chat a lot about online dramas and similar things.

Word order and word choice are awkward. 'Dramas online' should be 'online dramas', and 'umm stuff' is informal and vague; replace with 'similar things' for clarity.

× Umm, as I mentioned before, I'm not an extrovert person, more like an introvert, so I usually prefer to chat with only one close friend.

✓ As I mentioned before, I'm not an extroverted person, more like an introvert, so I usually prefer to chat with only one close friend.

Use 'extroverted' (adjective) rather than 'extrovert person' for natural phrasing. Removing filler 'Umm' also improves formality.

× That's when I feel the most comfortable to let out my thoughts and say what I'm thinking.

✓ That's when I feel most comfortable letting out my thoughts and saying what I'm thinking.

Use the adjective 'most comfortable' followed by the gerund forms 'letting' and 'saying' for parallel structure and correctness after 'feel comfortable'.

× Well, I would prefer to communicate face to face as it gives me a sense of belonging and if I can only communicate via social media, I would say that I love to video call just to see their face emotions and stuff.

✓ I prefer to communicate face to face because it gives me a sense of belonging, but if I can only communicate via social media, I like to video-call so I can see their facial expressions.

Original is long and contains awkward phrases: 'face emotions' should be 'facial expressions', 'love to video call' can be 'like to video-call', and conjunctions should connect contrasting ideas ('but'). Simplify and correct word choices.

× Usually I don't I'm, I have to say that I'm a peacemaker, so I usually avoid, uh, arguments and conflicts.

✓ Usually I don't. I have to say that I'm a peacemaker, so I usually avoid arguments and conflicts.

Original has disfluent filler and punctuation errors. Split into two sentences and remove unnecessary commas and fillers 'uh'. No article needed before 'arguments' or 'conflicts'.

× I used to stop them when my friends are having trouble with each other and I don't like wars also, that's why.

✓ I used to stop them when my friends had trouble with each other, and I don't like conflicts either; that's why.

Mixes past ('used to stop') with present progressive ('are having'); maintain past tense 'had' to match 'used to'. 'Wars' is too strong and informal here; use 'conflicts' or 'arguments'. 'Also' placed awkwardly; use 'either' or restructure the sentence.