Chatting— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Start with a concise topic sentence, avoid redundancy, and add one specific example of a recent conversation to show progress. Use linking words to connect ideas (e.g., however, so, therefore).

예시: Yes, I do. I used to chat a lot with friends in Japan, but after moving to London I found it harder to communicate due to language barriers. However, I try to join class discussions about current news or football matches, and last week I successfully talked about the World Cup with a classmate, which made me feel more confident.

제안: Keep the answer direct and sensitive: give one or two suitable topics and a brief reason or example. Avoid over-explaining sensitive historical details unless relevant. Use linking words like for example or because.

예시: I usually pick simple, friendly topics. For example, I often talk about my hometown, Nagasaki, because it helps people understand where I’m from; sometimes I also mention local food or festivals to keep the conversation light and engaging.

제안: Begin with a clear topic sentence, then give one concise reason and an example of how you handle groups. Use linking words like because and so to show cause and effect.

예시: I prefer one-on-one conversations because I find it hard to join large groups. For example, in a group of seven or eight people I often wait for a pause before speaking, so I usually meet friends individually to avoid stress.

제안: Keep the response succinct: state your preference, give one clear reason and a brief contrast. Replace repetitive phrases and use linking words like because and whereas.

예시: I prefer social media because it gives me time to plan my responses. Whereas face-to-face talks are stressful for me since I have to reply immediately and worry about making language mistakes.

제안: Answer directly, then give a short reason and a brief cultural note if relevant. Avoid repeating similar phrases; use linking words like because and so.

예시: I sometimes argue with friends, but not often because I prefer to avoid conflict. In Japan, people generally try to keep a peaceful atmosphere, so I usually resolve disagreements calmly and quickly.

× Yes, I used to enjoy chatting with my friends, especially when I was in Japan, but after coming to London, it has been quite challenging for me to communicate with others, mainly due to language barriers.

✓ Yes, I used to enjoy chatting with my friends, especially when I was in Japan, but after coming to London it became quite challenging for me to communicate with others, mainly due to language barriers.

The original mixes 'used to' (past habit) with present perfect 'has been' which creates tense inconsistency. Use simple past 'became' to keep the timeline consistent: past habit in Japan followed by a change when the student came to London. Suggestion: keep events in the same time frame unless you intend to emphasize a continuing state.

× But I try to join conversation with my classmates about topics such as news and sports to improve English.

✓ But I try to join conversations with my classmates about topics such as news and sports to improve my English.

Count noun 'conversation' needs plural 'conversations' here, and the phrase 'improve English' requires the possessive adjective 'my'. Also 'try to join' is acceptable. Suggestion: use correct plural and possessive: 'join conversations' and 'my English'.

× For example, when I meet someone for the first time, I usually talk about Nagasaki Prefecture, which is my hometown and it's famous for the atomic bombing in 1945, so that they can understand where I was born and the conversation continues.

✓ For example, when I meet someone for the first time, I usually talk about Nagasaki Prefecture, which is my hometown and is famous for the atomic bombing in 1945, so they can understand where I was born and the conversation can continue.

The original has a redundancy 'it's famous' which is acceptable but 'and it's' interrupts flow; changing to 'and is' is more concise. Also 'so that they can understand' can be simplified to 'so they can understand' and 'the conversation continues' should be 'the conversation can continue' to show possibility. Suggestion: streamline clauses and use modal 'can' for potential continuation.

× I definitely prefer one-on-one conversations, mainly because I usually struggle to find the right moment to start talking, especially when I'm large groups of seven or eight members.

✓ I definitely prefer one-on-one conversations, mainly because I usually struggle to find the right moment to start talking, especially when I'm in large groups of seven or eight people.

Missing preposition 'in' before 'large groups' causes an error. Also 'members' is better replaced by 'people' in this context. Suggestion: add 'in' and use 'people' for natural phrasing.

× Therefore, I usually avoid attending social events at various restaurants because I always feel stressed.

✓ Therefore, I usually avoid attending social events at restaurants because I always feel stressed.

The phrase 'various restaurants' is redundant; 'at restaurants' is more natural. No major grammatical error beyond style. Suggestion: simplify to sound more natural.

× It's mainly because we can take a lot of time to think about what to write in messages.

✓ It's mainly because I can take more time to think about what to write in messages.

The student refers to their personal preference, so using 'we' is inconsistent with earlier first-person statements. Use 'I' and 'more time' is more natural than 'a lot of time'. Suggestion: keep subject consistent with 'I' and prefer 'more time'.

× On the other hand, communicating in person is very stressful for me because I don't want to make mistakes in conversation, but we cannot have a lot of time to think about what to respond in conversations.

✓ On the other hand, communicating in person is very stressful for me because I don't want to make mistakes in conversation, and I don't have much time to think about how to respond.

Switching from 'I' to 'we' is inconsistent; replace with 'I'. 'Cannot have a lot of time' is awkward; 'don't have much time' is natural. Also 'how to respond' is clearer than 'what to respond in conversations'. Suggestion: maintain first-person and use clear phrasing.

× I sometimes argue with my friend, but not very often because I want to avoid unnecessary confrontations with anyone.

✓ I sometimes argue with friends, but not very often because I want to avoid unnecessary confrontations with anyone.

Saying 'my friend' implies a specific person; 'friends' matches the general context. Both are possible, but 'friends' fits the question about friends generally. Suggestion: use plural for general statements.

× In Japan in general, people tend to avoid making people angry or annoy unnecessarily, mainly because they want to make atmosphere more peaceful and calm.

✓ In Japan in general, people tend to avoid making others angry or annoying them unnecessarily, mainly because they want to make the atmosphere more peaceful and calm.

Original mixes 'making people angry' with 'annoy' (base form), causing parallelism error. Use parallel gerunds: 'making others angry' or 'annoying them'. Also add the definite article 'the' before 'atmosphere'. Suggestion: keep parallel structure and include necessary articles.