Chatting— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Сократите паузы и запинки, используйте более естественные фразы; сформулируйте главное утверждение сразу, затем кратко объясните причину. Например, избегайте слов-паразитов («uh», «umm») и исправьте «introversy» на «introversion».

예시: I'm an introvert, but I enjoy chatting online because it lets me keep in touch with friends when meeting in person is difficult due to my work and my shy nature.

제안: Сформулируйте ответ прямо и конкретно, добавьте связующие слова для логики и уберите повторения; используйте точные выражения («deal with» вместо «cope with») и завершённые примеры.

예시: We usually talk about our daily lives and problems we deal with. We also discuss K-pop idols a lot, since many of us are fans, and sharing news about them is a common topic.

제안: Сформулируйте чёткое мнение и объяснение, используйте связки («because», «so») правильно; избегайте путаных фраз («only their opinion of one») и лишних повторов.

예시: I prefer talking one-on-one because I value hearing one person's opinion without group influence, and it's easier for me to express myself in a private conversation.

제안: Хорошая структура, но улучшите плавность и уберите лишние паузы; свяжите причины и следствие с помощью более естественных формулировок и корректной пунктуации.

예시: I like both, but I prefer social media because as an introvert I find it hard to show strong emotions in person, and chatting online allows me to be more honest and composed.

제안: Избегайте эмоциональных перегибов и повторов; дайте компактное объяснение и приведите пример альтернативного поведения. Не стоит включать фразы вроде «I want to cry» — они делают ответ менее естественным в экзамене.

예시: I'm not argumentative, so I rarely argue with friends; we usually joke instead. If tensions arise, I tend to step back and calmly discuss the issue later rather than quarrel.

× Actually, I'm an introvert, but uh, As for the online chatting, I am really into it and it helps me to keep in touch with them, uh, because sometimes personal meetings are really, uh, difficult to cope with and umm, not just because of my introversy, but also because of work.

✓ Actually, I'm an introvert, but as for online chatting, I am really into it and it helps me to keep in touch with my friends, because sometimes personal meetings are difficult to manage, not just because of my introversion but also because of work.

The pronoun 'them' is vague; use 'my friends' to specify the referent. 'Introversy' is not a correct noun; use 'introversion'. 'Cope with' is followed by a noun; 'difficult to cope with' is acceptable but 'difficult to manage' is clearer. Also fix capitalization and filler words. Suggestion: replace vague pronouns with specific nouns and use correct noun forms.

× Uh, we chat about our everyday lives, uh, about the problems that we uh, cope with and uh, we faced with.

✓ We chat about our everyday lives and the problems that we cope with and have faced.

The sentence mixes present tense 'cope with' and past 'faced with' incorrectly. Use present perfect 'have faced' to indicate experiences up to now, and remove the unnecessary preposition after 'faced'. Suggestion: keep tense consistent and avoid extra prepositions.

× That is why, uh, if we chat, it is mostly about ourselves or about celebrities we like, uh, because we are mostly K pop fans and it makes our lives.

✓ That is why, if we chat, it is mostly about ourselves or about celebrities we like, because we are mostly K-pop fans and that gives us something to talk about.

'It makes our lives' is unclear and ungrammatical here. Replace with a clear clause such as 'that gives us something to talk about'. Also hyphenate 'K-pop' and restructure for clarity. Suggestion: ensure each clause has a clear subject and verb.

× For me, it is important to uh, talk only with one person because I want to uh, see and to understand that it is the only their opinion of one, one person and that it is not influenced by diversity of them.

✓ For me, it is important to talk with only one person because I want to see and understand that it is just that person's opinion and that it is not influenced by others.

Problems include incorrect word order ('only with one person' -> 'with only one person'), awkward phrase 'the only their opinion of one, one person' and 'diversity of them'. Use 'that person's opinion' and 'others' for subject-verb agreement and clarity. Suggestion: simplify and reorder phrases to match English syntax.

× And umm, it makes easier, it is easier for me to do so.

✓ And it makes it easier for me to do so.

Adverb and adjective placement is wrong; include the pronoun 'it' as the object: 'makes it easier'. Remove redundancy. Suggestion: use 'makes it easier' for natural English.

× Actually I like both but the second one is easier for me as I'm an introvert and sometimes it is hard for me to be emotional during the conversations and during meetings. That is why when I chat online. I can be more honest.

✓ Actually, I like both, but the latter is easier for me because I'm an introvert and sometimes it's hard for me to show emotion during conversations and meetings. That is why when I chat online, I can be more honest.

Sentence fragments and punctuation errors: 'That is why when I chat online. I can...' should be one sentence. 'the second one' -> 'the latter'; 'to be emotional' -> 'to show emotion'. Suggestion: fix fragments and use appropriate vocabulary.

× I'm not, uh, I'm not an argumentative person and that is why I don't argue with my friends.

✓ I'm not an argumentative person, and that's why I don't argue with my friends.

Redundant 'I'm not' repetition and filler words disrupt fluency. Combine clauses with a comma and contraction for natural speech. Suggestion: avoid repetition and unnecessary fillers.

× So we just joke around. And that is why it is actually not really appropriate for me to argue because, uh, quarrels make you feel bad and I become nervous.

✓ So we just joke around, and that's why arguing is not really appropriate for me, because quarrels make me feel bad and nervous.

Use 'arguing' (noun) instead of 'it is actually not really appropriate for me to argue' for conciseness. 'Quarrels make you feel bad and I become nervous' mixes general and personal perspective; make it personal 'make me feel bad and nervous'. Suggestion: keep perspective consistent and choose concise structures.

× I want to cry.

✓ I feel like crying.

In context, 'I want to cry' is grammatical but sounds abrupt; 'I feel like crying' is a more natural present-tense expression of emotional response. Suggestion: use 'feel like' for emotional states commonly expressed in conversation.