Chatting— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to make your answer more concise and natural by avoiding redundancy. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and keep your sentences clear and direct.

예시: Yes, I enjoy chatting with friends because, as an extrovert, I like learning about their hobbies and sharing my daily activities with them.

제안: Your answer is good but can be improved by using linking words and more specific vocabulary. Also, avoid repeating similar ideas and keep the answer focused.

예시: I usually chat about my daily life, such as the anime episodes I'm watching, and I also ask about their routines and the latest college dramas, which helps me feel connected and happy.

제안: Try to improve sentence structure and use linking words to make your answer more coherent. Also, avoid repeating phrases and keep the answer within 5 sentences.

예시: It depends on the topic. For personal matters, I prefer chatting with one friend, but for funny memes or group-related topics, I share them in our group chat. This way, I enjoy my time effectively.

제안: Your answer is clear but can be improved by combining sentences and using linking words for better flow. Also, avoid repeating similar ideas.

예시: I enjoy both face-to-face and social media communication. When I'm far from friends, I use social media, but if we're nearby, I prefer meeting them in person or inviting them over.

제안: Try to express your ideas more clearly and avoid filler words like 'umm'. Use linking words to connect your thoughts and correct grammar mistakes for better clarity.

예시: I usually avoid arguing with friends because I fear confrontation. Sometimes, I feel hurt by their words but prefer to listen quietly instead of arguing.

× Yes, I like chatting with friends as extrovert person myself, I want to know their hobbies and interest and I want to share my daily routine and what I am currently doing and what am I up to.

✓ Yes, I like chatting with friends as an extroverted person myself. I want to know their hobbies and interests, and I want to share my daily routine, what I am currently doing, and what I am up to.

The adjective 'extrovert' should be in its adjectival form 'extroverted' to correctly describe 'person'. Also, 'interest' should be plural 'interests' to match 'hobbies'. The sentence was also run-on and needed to be split for clarity.

× I actually chat about everything about my daily life, like what I'm doing and what the episodes of anime I'm watching, and I want to know their daily routine, hot college dramas they're going through.

✓ I actually chat about everything related to my daily life, like what I'm doing and the episodes of anime I'm watching, and I want to know their daily routine and the popular college dramas they're watching.

The phrase 'everything about my daily life' is better expressed as 'everything related to my daily life'. Also, 'hot college dramas they're going through' is unclear; 'popular college dramas they're watching' is more appropriate.

× It actually depends what kind of topic I'm going to talk.

✓ It actually depends on what kind of topic I'm going to talk about.

The verb 'depends' requires the preposition 'on' to connect to the object. Also, 'talk' needs the preposition 'about' to indicate the topic.

× That's why that's how I will enjoy my time.

✓ That's how I enjoy my time.

The phrase 'That's why that's how' is redundant and awkward. Simplifying to 'That's how I enjoy my time' is clearer and grammatically correct.

× I actually don't mind anything. I love talking face to face and by social media.

✓ I actually don't mind anything. I love talking face to face and via social media.

The preposition 'by' is incorrect when referring to communication methods; 'via' or 'through' is appropriate.

× Also when I am not with them and I am far apart from them, I use social media as our communication.

✓ Also, when I am not with them and am far away from them, I use social media to communicate.

The phrase 'far apart from them' is better expressed as 'far away from them'. Also, 'use social media as our communication' is awkward; 'use social media to communicate' is clearer.

× But when I'm around them I prefer face to face connection so I go to them or invite them over.

✓ But when I'm around them, I prefer face-to-face connection, so I go to them or invite them over.

'Face to face' should be hyphenated as 'face-to-face' when used as an adjective. Also, commas are needed for clarity.

× Actually I don't argue with friends because I'm very afraid of confronting people.

✓ Actually, I don't argue with friends because I'm very afraid of confronting people.

A comma after 'Actually' improves sentence flow.

× Umm like sometimes like oh I didn't like the way my friend talked to me but I couldn't confirm then about that it but it still hurt me.

✓ Umm, sometimes I didn't like the way my friend talked to me, but I couldn't confront them about it, and it still hurt me.

'Confirm then about that it' is incorrect; the intended meaning is 'confront them about it'. Also, commas improve clarity.

× So I don't argue, I just listen and lift.

✓ So I don't argue; I just listen and let it go.

The word 'lift' is incorrect here; the correct phrase is 'let it go' meaning to not hold a grudge. Also, a semicolon separates two independent clauses.