Library— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be direct, accurate and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence (Yes/No and frequency). Use correct vocabulary (library, now), fix grammar (past vs present) and avoid unclear phrases like “rivalry” and “reach out my answer.” Limit to 2–3 sentences and include a brief reason. Use linking words like However or Nowadays correctly.

예시: When I was at university, I used to go to the library almost every week to find books and finish my homework. However, nowadays I rarely go because most resources are available online.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence describing main activities and then add specific details. Correct word choice and grammar (e.g., go to the library, borrow books, study with friends). Avoid contradictions (usually vs sometimes vs always). Use linking words such as and, also, for example.

예시: I usually used the library to study and borrow books to learn more about my courses. For example, I often spent a couple of hours there completing assignments, borrowing textbooks and chatting quietly with a friend while we revised together.

제안: Answer directly (Yes/No) and give coherent supporting details. Fix vocabulary and grammar (child/childhood, library, every weekend). Complete sentences — mention which book you liked or the type of books. Use linking words such as because or so.

예시: Yes, I did. When I was a child, there was a small library in my village, so I visited it every weekend. I especially liked storybooks about animals and adventures because they were fun and imaginative.

제안: Avoid hesitation phrases and answer directly with a balanced view. Use accurate expressions (Chinese children, in China). Provide specific reasons or examples and use linking words like However, In my experience, or For example. Keep it concise and complete the sentence.

예시: I think many children in China do visit libraries, especially in cities where schools encourage reading. However, attendance can vary: in rural areas children may have less access, while urban schools often take students on library visits.

× In the past when I was in university, I normally went to rivalry every week to find a book to reach out my answer to complete my homework.

✓ In the past, when I was at university, I usually went to the library every week to find books to help me complete my homework.

Multiple issues: incorrect noun 'rivalry' instead of 'library' (word choice not in list but corrected), preposition 'in university' should be 'at university' (preposition error, ID 11), 'normally' better as 'usually' (adverb choice), 'to find a book to reach out my answer to complete my homework' is awkward and ungrammatical (sentence structure error, ID 26). I corrected word order and verb forms: 'find books to help me complete my homework' is clear. Suggestion: simplify clauses, use correct prepositions and collocations (go to university -> at university; go to library; find books to help me complete my homework).

× But in nowadays I nearly don't go.

✓ But nowadays I hardly ever go.

The phrase 'in nowadays' is incorrect (preposition error, ID 11) and 'nearly don't go' is unidiomatic (adverb placement/choice, IDs 20 and 13). Use 'nowadays' without 'in' and 'hardly ever' or 'rarely' for frequency. Maintain present tense: 'I hardly ever go.'

× Like I mentioned before, when I went to rivalry I usually went there for complete my homework and five books to get new knowledge and sometimes I always enjoy with my friend at university in the library also.

✓ As I mentioned before, when I went to the library I usually went there to complete my homework and borrow books to gain knowledge, and sometimes I would enjoy being with my friends at the library.

'for complete my homework' requires 'to complete' (infinitive vs gerund; ID 8). 'went to rivalry' should be 'went to the library' (word choice). 'five books' is unclear and unnecessary; 'borrow books' is appropriate (quantifier issue if precise number intended, ID 14). 'I always enjoy with my friend' is incorrect: 'enjoy being with my friends' is correct (preposition/pronoun and verb form issues, IDs 11 and 12). Suggested improvement: use correct verb patterns (go to X to do Y; borrow books; enjoy being with someone).

× When I was a shy, there was a library for.

✓ When I was shy, there was a library for the people in my village.

'a shy' incorrectly uses an article with an adjective (article error and adjective use, IDs 22 and 13). The original sentence also fragments 'there was a library for. People in my village.' which is a sentence structure error (ID 26). Correction: remove the article before 'shy' and combine clauses: 'there was a library for the people in my village.' Suggestion: do not use 'a' before adjectives used as complements; keep clauses together for clarity.

× So I went to that rivalry every week on weekend and my favorite book was.

✓ So I went to that library every weekend, and I had a favorite book.

'that rivalry' should be 'that library' (word choice). 'every week on weekend' is ungrammatical; use 'every weekend' (preposition/phrase error, ID 11). The clause 'my favorite book was.' is incomplete (sentence without a verb or complement, ID 23/26). I completed it as 'I had a favorite book.' Suggestion: use correct time expressions and complete clauses.

× Let me think about it first.

✓ Let me think about it for a moment first.

The original is grammatical but slightly incomplete in register for spoken English; to be natural, add 'for a moment' (sentence structure/style issue, ID 26). Suggestion: use brief fillers like 'for a moment' to sound more natural.

× I have never thought about this Chinese before, but I believe that every kid in every countries normally go to the library for their education and.

✓ I have never thought about Chinese children specifically before, but I believe that children in many countries usually go to the library for their education.

Several errors: 'this Chinese' is incorrect pronoun/word choice (ID 12). 'every kid in every countries' mixes singular and plural (singular/plural issue, ID 1) and wrong article/quantifier (ID 14). 'normally go' should be 'usually go' and must agree 'children ... usually go' (subject-verb agreement, ID 27). The trailing 'and.' is an incomplete fragment (sentence structure, ID 26). Suggestions: use 'children' or 'kids' consistently, match singular/plural forms, and complete the sentence.